I love this poem a lot

because it reminds me of a time i had as well.
just a good poem with feelings that connected wtih me instantly.

The content of this poem was seemingly written on a personal level on which many of us can relate. I believe it reflected true feelings so it is excellent in that regaurd

To quote myself "feelings are sometimes hard to share and impossible to sell

If I attempted to edit it would look something like this

Cheater....dedicated to Victor Manzanoby Shisana

Hey cheater, I have something
to say! when you said "I love you."
I knew you were lieing. You're a
heart eater,you come into my
life and walk away,leaving foot
prints and going with your new
wife.You have used me to get to
her.Just remember,You will "NEVER"
find another one quite like me.
The ember that roared and my heart
melted, but I must remember,rumors
are only rumors, but how would you feel
being pelted by them?? If you hear
that certain bell when you see me
you wouldn't be with her.I promise
she's straight from hell. I admit it, I
still have feelings for you.You two
fit so I'll walk away, and I hope you
never forget me. Not a day passes
without me thinking of you. You
were my First Love.It could of lasted,
but you cheated in the game of
love, you played with my heart, you
no longer are my one and only,good
bye Victor.It is the end of our days.

This felt like a really fast pacing piece, and i think its because of how you structured and wrote this. Every line flows onto the next, which makes me read it without taking a breathe. Usually i dont like poems which are just one whole passage, because i feel like it is too drawn out, but since this was such a fast pacing piece, i didnt have a problem with it!
It also feels like you venting which places a great deal of emotions in this poem. What makes this piece good is because its rather personal and many people can relate to it, which kind of triggers memory lane for a lot of us.

"goodbye Victor.It is the end of our days. "
- i think the ending to this piece was strong, and really symbolises "its over"

good work !

Let me tell u...despite that the 1st one seemed more poetic ...this was from deep inside your heart,
let me admit ur feelings where revealed CLEARLY>....and I found u realy brave and HONEST..through this poem.

impressing Truly
loved it
5/5 again !

This is quite a good poem.
it could use a bit more "enter" (button)'s though
idk how to call it in english

This is quite a good poem.
it could use a bit more "enter" (button)'s though
idk how to call it in english

Hey i really like this ,
it has a great meaning to it and is kind of like something i have gone throguh, so i get the meaning maybe better then others? idunno but i like it :)

I like the way you share your feelings. It gives life to your poetry.