Comments : Nicotine Dreams

  • 13 years ago

    by Cindy

    Nice job with the imagery in this piece.

    A now awakened body fights to drive sanity away
    Let the demon retreat into a crevice
    that's enveloped by life's mundane circumstances
    never to escape again

    This stanza really stood out for me.
    Good job!
    Take care
    Cindy

  • 13 years ago

    by silvershoes

    With hands . . . everywhere
    ^
    The periods are perfect here. You could've easily gone wrong, but seriously, they are perfect!
    This is the most beautiful of the poems I've read by you thus far. It deserved the win in my contest, thank you for participating.
    The imagery is precise, colorful, and flawless.
    Very well done.
    "viscous" <- did you mean vicious?

    I've reread this thrice now :)

    5/5