Wow..this was such a beauitful piece. I forget about the emotions due to the awesome diction and imagery. I loved the imagery in this piece, it was breath taking. Wow...I really don't know what else to say. Such a power house of a poem. I loved every line. Great work dear. Nik
I thought this was really well done for the most part. The flow was really good and the imagery was powerful. The only thing I would change or critique is the fact that your 4th and 5th stanzas don't rhyme while theo thers do. I'm not sure if most people will notice this but it does make a difference. I hope you'll change it.... so I'll still give a 5.5
Very well written! I loved the first n 5th stanza! ur choice of words is awesome! 5/5!
8 years ago
That. was. amazing! it was very very powerful, and every line i read just wow! your flow was perfect, the way you worded it was great, the way you ended it was nicely done! And i loved it, this is going in my favourites :)
I really enjoyed this. The topic (well at least what I THINK you're talking about) is one which is very hard to relay without it sounding annoying or non-poetic however you've done a marvelous job of avoiding both of those. I like all your metaphors and I have an affinity for the line 'fire touch the sky'. I REALLY enjoyed that one. Over all you've done an exceptional job and I'm blown away by it. 5/5, truly amazing.