Comments : I Miss Your Love

  • 13 years ago

    by Dreamofolwin

    This is such a sad, heartfelt write that you have penned. Your images are very vivid and your poem is also beautifully expressed. Very Well Done :)

    Lots of Love, Olwin.

  • 13 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This really touches my heart Water is one of the essentials for life of the four elements earth, fire, water and wind you must also remember that as the master reflects you sorrow comes from the same well where you have drawn joy
    << Psalm 104:16 >>

    The trees of the LORD are well watered, the cedars of Lebanon that he planted.

  • 13 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    The imagery is very beautiful I cannot say enough about the debth of the poem

  • 13 years ago

    by Ingrid

    When the darkness of my
    hair, flirts with the breeze

    ^^Hair that flirts with the breeze..I think the way you worded this made the reader realize how alone you must be feeling

    When the beats of my heart
    pump bitter tears

    ^^
    To have only tears in your hart, oh Nana:(

    When those tears ripple
    stories about falling leaves

    ^^^
    Dwelling on sadness is what this is about

    and the gardens of my being
    become fields of naked trees

    ^^
    I actually saw a field with dead trees as I read this, and I love the metaphor, it is very accurate

    and the sweetness of flowers
    turns sour, as its fading color
    lacks the beauty to please

    ^^
    Lacks the beauty to please..wow! Good wording!!!!!

    When the rage of my sorrow
    beats the waves of stormy seas

    ^^
    I can feel anger and resentment within these lines, about the hows and whys no doubt?

    As I wake up facing the truth
    after sinking in pleasant dreams

    ^^
    This is very familiar to me, to wake up and then realize you lost that person

    and how I miss your love

    When I plant these pity hopes
    in barren fields , and around
    thirsty streams ..

    ^^
    I like that you gave the reader a hint of hope in the end.

    Beautiful work, Nana..I can relate to it well.

    Stay strong sweetie

    *hugs*

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 13 years ago

    by chind

    WOW. oh my god, this was just beautiful! Such gentle words and crazy images you have created. A beautiful piece. I loved it ! I also like your rhyme scheme :D good work matey !!

  • 13 years ago

    by Jim McMillen the man within

    Wow, I found this one amazing , I dont even know how to describe it. Maybe contrastingly
    explicit is the term I am looking for .
    The way you described all your feelings in contrast, yet I felt a similarity within each one . Beautiful flow of expression , so easy to read & understand 5/5 .....Jim

  • 13 years ago

    by Andrew

    10/10 this poem is very similar to one of mines so i can kind of relate but anyways this has to be one of the best poems i've read in a long time

  • Nice...it was beautiful

  • 13 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Awwww... I love this poem! I can really relate... and it always makes me feel better when I feel that way. Excellent job with this poem. I loved every metaphor! Take care! :)

  • 13 years ago

    by silvershoes

    This is absolutely beautiful. I read it aloud and was moved by how the words sounded coming from my mouth. Is that vain? Haha! Very, very beautiful. I'm at a loss for words.

  • 13 years ago

    by Cassandra

    Wow your really guud i love this poem and im glad to have youhh as muh friend lol thanks again
    5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Alex D

    "When those tears ripple
    stories about falling leaves

    and the gardens of my being
    become fields of naked trees"

    Awesome awesome awesome lines, theyre breath taking. Over all very cool idea as far as flow and form for this and the rhyming was clever and fit well. 5/5 very nice

  • 13 years ago

    by Jess

    Ahw, I Adored This Poem.
    You Have Some Great Talent, I Envy It.
    Make's My Poems Look Rubish:P Haha.
    I Love your Style Of Writing, And How you Just Say All That you Need To Say.
    And Also A Very Nice Flow=D
    5/5
    Can You Comment And Rate One Of My Poems Too? That Would Be Great!
    Much Love, Jessi<3

  • 13 years ago

    by Fear2love

    Wow ur good haha 5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Siglawoo

    When those tears ripple
    stories about falling leaves

    EPIC !!!!