Some of the grammar is a little off and periods seem to be used for style's sake but without regard for sentence structure. Other than that, I like the "Suffering isn't enough?" insertion. It struck me as curious and different - good things. I also like that you used the word "mountainous!" Very nice.
This poem touches me so much. It's being a while that i havn't red a poem and before the end i had to take a pause to savor the beauty of such a sad , love poem like this. We all feels emotions, but not most of us could put it in words like you do. Very, very well done. Keep it up, kel.