Comments : The Coming Day

  • 7 years ago

    by Dreamofolwin

    Woh.. what a Fantastic write! So descriptive with beautiful images. Can just see the new day dawning as darkness is expelled :)
    Excellent I thought... Very Well Done Austin! :]

    (esp .liked the last 2 lines of the last stanza.. Amazing! )

  • 7 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    Lots of repetitiveness with 'light' but otherwise amazing! I am very impressed, I think this is one of the better poems I've seen from you! Wellll donee!

  • 7 years ago

    by Ronald Edwards

    Jad , excellant write. I was able to imagine the coming of this new day. Well chosen words and flow. Thanks for sharing

  • 7 years ago

    by Soft Parade

    Some really unique imagery painted here, I have never heard the sunrise described as a aterfall of light, I was transported to the moon watching the sun light fall down over teh earth when i read that...top quality!!!

  • 7 years ago

    by Rania Moallem

    I dnt have words to say...Im speechless by r word choice..just speechless..and dont think this is a lame comment..but I really lack the ability to choose a part to comment over..am just facinated by that you have written..

    no one write nature better than you Jad..oonly Ingrid write as good..wen its about nature..
    but no one else no

    this deserves a nomination

  • 7 years ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck

    Outstanding work, Austin.

    This is poetry written in such a way, it is a journey, a little trip that makes you see the wonders of life.

    The moon shines forth bright
    As an angel in the sky.
    Tearing away the darkness into light,
    Like separating truths from lies.

    ^^
    I loved the image of the angel. I have a son that looked like a little angel, complete with the red curls and chubby little body, ha ha. I like how you have woven the comparisons into your work.

    Great!

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 7 years ago

    by alka mendiratta

    5/5.CONGRATS.
    A poem with a beautiful imagery.The moon's act is splendid....wow! Keep the good work going.God bless.

  • 7 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    Amazing rhyme scheme imagery and natural preception well delivered

  • 7 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    THis is written so beautifully..like a blossoming of a flower! I like the way the start of the verse opened slowly painting a
    nice introduction to a new season...lovely read! Congrats on the win!!

  • 7 years ago

    by Christopher Wry

    Nice word flow and the imagery is too.

  • 7 years ago

    by tainted melody

    I really loved this poem , it was very descriptive and flowed really nicely. ^_^

  • 7 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Wow... beautiful poem! I love the vivid imagery you've created .. It made me envision it and I really enjoyed it. Congratulations on the win!
    Your poem reminded me of my poem "Rise, Rise, Oh Sun" The meaning seems similar. Great job!

  • 7 years ago

    by Maegan Bravo

    I could only hope to become such a beautiful poet. This piece, as said before, is absolutely amazing. It captivated me, and I seemed to flow with the words. Truly exquisite. You deserved the win. :)

  • 7 years ago

    by Jackie Patterson

    The way you made this poem so picturesque is amazing! The comparison of colors to the lives of people and the contrast of light and dark to lies most definetly makes this poem stand out from ordinary poetry! Great work.

  • Wow , such a beautiful poem Austin , & so eloquently written. I enjoyed reading it over & over 5/5 ...Jim

  • 7 years ago

    by H. Elizabeth

    Wow. I can TOTALLY see why this won =)

    5/5

    GREAT JOB! =D! I LOVED IT!

  • 7 years ago

    by Clarise

    WHOA this was awesome. great work!

  • 7 years ago

    by HvN

    This poem is absolutely incredible my friend! Your rhyme and choice of word is uncanny and brilliant! I can envision each stanza's description within my mind's eye and it is absolutely beautiful.

    5/5

    Keep up the good work!

  • 6 years ago

    by Skyfire

    Beautiful words that create a beautiful image!