Comments : A Spring's Mourning

  • 7 years ago

    by Beautiful Chaos

    A beautiful and touching poem Kay, I really enjoyed it and can offer no criticism, just thanks for sharing it with us all.

  • 7 years ago

    by Edward D Zurovec

    There is beauty in your words, healing words, very personal and I like the format
    -Perhaps-
    it is strange now how cold can cancel cold too warm feelings and seasons
    bring back memories
    -Yet again-
    I love the raw beauty of December disguising Deaths
    -Symbolic-
    nature, likened to Rebirth
    -Sinful-
    words are they...
    Springtime bliss! She has loathed
    everything related
    -She longs-
    for Winter's kiss

    I have the deepest admiration for this heartfelt Poem. For within, a little peak at Peace. And Blessings.

  • 7 years ago

    by Sylvia

    Well done. As I read this, it brought to mind a friend and it is as if you wrote this especially for her.

  • 7 years ago

    by Twisted Heart

    Wonderful job, Kay. Your words have left me quite speechless. Beautiful comfort to all who live within the seasons of change and heartache. True, how they tend to reach within the depths of our soul and pull at our very heart. You have brought a feeling of calm with this.... loved the ending stanza...

    -She longs-

    longs for Winter's kiss,
    When snow shall mask
    her saddest memory.

    Wonderful, just wonderful....
    Jeannie

  • 7 years ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck

    How would it be to forever be stuck in rewind, I often wonder about that question..to not be able to move on at all. You worded that question very eloquently, Kay. A sad poem, very insightful too. Made me remember a story I heard long ago.

    Well done, very well done

    -She longs-

    longs for Winter's kiss,
    When snow shall mask
    her saddest memory.

    ^^
    Favorite part, very poetic wording.

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 7 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    I got lost in the words, and the images you allowed us to view. Going into my favorites , wonderful piece

  • 7 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    I got lost in the words, and the images you allowed us to view. Going into my favorites , wonderful piece

  • 7 years ago

    by Jad

    A great job is in orders first off. Secondly now I will tell you the imagery is wonderful. The beauty you have painted in your words is so amazing. Another thing that really got my attention was how you had a header for each individual part of you poem. A truly amazing write. great job and keep writing.

  • 7 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    I'm not really much of a fan of incorporating the seasons into poems anymore - it seems so overdone. However, in poems such as yours you know how to make it work and make it your own so it doesn't seem like 'just another one of those poems'. After reading Rob's comment, there is indeed a hidden meaning behind the poem and this poem is written for a particular someone. I thought the emotion you tied in with your words & reference to the seasons was absolutely stunning. I really loved this write, it's something I know I could read over and over again without getting tired of it. The hidden meaning in the poem makes me appreciate it even more...it makes all that more sense. Awesome job with this!

  • 7 years ago

    by Soft Parade

    A true gem of a peom.

    the raw beauty of December
    when Mother Nature
    has stripped away
    her coats and coverings
    in celebration of freedom.

    this was my favourite stanza. I have never made the connection of winter stripping away evrything to freedom, its a wonderful comparison.

  • 7 years ago

    by Sungrl And Mrs Whatsit

    Your separated words, between some stanzas, seem to me to be a gentle background chorus, actually musical, giving leadership to and indication of, the next thoughtful feeling...
    ...a lovely and effective device
    well-used here in the service
    of conveying your intended depth...

  • 7 years ago

    by Ray Smallshaw

    Symbolic sprang to mind when I was reading this poem perhaps because I am at that age when I am in the winter of my life.
    Though this poem did not make me feel cold though as you get older the to many people that you have love depart you.
    Like Twisted and Ingid the last verse does ring true

    longs for Winter's kiss,
    When snow shall mask
    her saddest memory

    An excellent poem 5/5 RayS

  • 7 years ago

    by Clown

    Within our rememberance of humman time, these two season are the oposing roles in wich you have shown us here. we normally see spring has a time for joy and play, not pain and longing, and winter is usaully very somber and quiet. I absolutly love this poem, its beautiful. You are an amazing poet, and you show your best in work like this. Keep up the poetry, keep up the good work

  • 6 years ago

    by Siglawoo

    When snow shall mask
    her saddest memory.

    These lines melted me... perfect ending.

  • 6 years ago

    by Cindy

    Thank you Kay. This is so beautiful and so deserving if the win. It brought tears to my eyes and I knew exactly the meaning. Thank you for the truely beautiful gift.
    I love you Cindy

  • 6 years ago

    by William Mocca

    ~Beautiful painting of words~
    WM