Comments : Winters Long Nights II

  • 13 years ago

    by Sylvia

    Winter in Phoenix is no where near the winter night you portray with this. I could see and feel the night you describe. Well done.

  • 13 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    Nature plays beautifully in your mind and comes out fantastic in print. Excellent poem , excelletn poet

  • 13 years ago

    by Dreamofolwin

    A beautifully written poem about winter! :) I love your nature poems Austin.. you write them with such ease and outstanding images for the mindseye :D

    BRavo!!! & Very Well Done :)
    Lol, Olwin

  • 13 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Plants decay and rot away
    frozen in time while
    layers of white cover
    remnants of their remains.

    ^^
    Remnants of their remains somehow sounds off, like you said the same thing twice.

    The sky finally cries,
    releasing pure memories
    obtain from billowing seas
    captured from those perished.

    ^^
    obtain, should be obtained

    Other than this it was a beautiful poem, Austin! Like I was flying above a winter landscape:)

    Well done,
    5/5 Ingrid

  • 13 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    Interesting to see a continuation of this 'series'. I thought you did just as well as the first part. I liked how you switched it up and instead of the wolf crying, it is now the sky. Although it was not the strongest metaphor, I liked the idea as it was different from the first part. Nice job..

  • 13 years ago

    by Sunshine

    Struggling against all odds,
    withered branches sway
    embracing the rapture
    Nature bestows all around.
    ^^wow..again ..again..how I'm loving these..u started with the same coherence u ended the 1st part with!!!..I love ur word choice..affecting me a lot..I only suggest adding (, or ;) after rapture..wen i reread it..with stopping for a while..had an impact as I read the last line. But as u wanna :)

    Plants decay and rot away
    frozen in time while
    layers of white cover
    remnants of their remains.
    ^^^Jad u are very unique..I love the image..and the way you are being able
    to picturize every single line u wanna , in our mind..i can see the reflection of snow..and dead plants all around

    The sky finally cries,
    releasing pure memories
    obtain from billowing seas
    captured from those perished.
    ^^wow...strongest expressions
    about rain.ive ever DEEPLY read-yet.
    incredible stanza..

    Now enchanting moments( i love that word..i llove it ..i love it)

    encompass the forest,
    pausing the still beauty of
    winters long nights.
    ^^^^jad aww i love this poem..i love these parts...i can't wait till I submit this comment and go read the 3rd one.

    -you are a GIFT.
    5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    The sky finally cries,
    releasing pure memories
    obtain from billowing seas
    captured from those perished.

    WOW! I like this stanza, the way you have described snowfall! Simply lovely!

    Now enchanting moments
    encompass the forest,
    pausing the still beauty of
    winters long nights.

    This is such a nice finish..a lovey in fact an enchanting description about winter's beauty! Loved the read :)