Tangerine Dawn

by Lonely Rider   Nov 9, 2010


Across tangerine horizon,
as dawn stirs remnant mignight hues,
shimmering curls of golden yawn,
wrap silent shadows, in pursue.

Daffodils sway with lively charm,
feathered colors fly over moor,
cuddling embrace of breezy arms,
bewitching - a new morn's allure.

** Was trying to write a Rispetto, but seems rhyme scheme doesnt conform :)

**A Rispetto ~ an Italian form which is a complete poem of two rhyming quatrains abab ccdd. Syllable count is 8 per line.

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  • 8 years ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Hello

    The fact that you attempt strict poetry forms such as this one is credit to you.

    I'm not sure if this would help?

    Across tangerine horizon,
    as dawn stirs remnant mignight hues,
    shimmering curls of golden yawn,
    wrap silent shadows, in pursue.
    ^
    use the dawn to finish the first line that will rhyme with 'yawn'
    'Sweeping zest of tangerine dawn'

    Then 'stirs the remnants of midnight hues'

    Daffodils sway with lively charms,
    feathered colors fly over moor,
    cuddling embrace of breezy arms,
    bewitching - a new morn's allure.
    ^
    Daffodils sway their lovely charms. *This would add to the needed plural.

    I hope this is helpful, or at least aids the thought process.

    Well done

    Michael

  • 8 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    I really like the title Tangerine Dawn as well as the images you have drawn...good job with this form...you did well!

  • 8 years ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck

    This was perfect, even if it was not intended to be unformatted. I think you were right in posting it as it is, it had such lovely imagery..you are gifted, very much so:)

    Well done, well done indeed!

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 8 years ago

    by Dreamofolwin

    A beautiful , beautiful poem! Love the images you have created for the minds eye Raj :) Just wonderful.....
    Lol, Olwin

  • 8 years ago

    by Sylvia

    You may have not met the form but you gave us such wonderful images with these words. Good job with this poem. It is lovely.