Comments : Tangerine Dawn

  • 8 years ago

    by Jad

    A wonderful Rispetto. I really love how you wrote this poem as a nature poem and painted a beautiful image with your very creative words. You portrayed a beautiful image and the flow was great and you also followed the form that you were given. Great job and keep writing.

  • 8 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    Beautiful images, and a joy to read. Awesome as always

  • 8 years ago

    by Sylvia

    You may have not met the form but you gave us such wonderful images with these words. Good job with this poem. It is lovely.

  • 8 years ago

    by Dreamofolwin

    A beautiful , beautiful poem! Love the images you have created for the minds eye Raj :) Just wonderful.....
    Lol, Olwin

  • 8 years ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck

    This was perfect, even if it was not intended to be unformatted. I think you were right in posting it as it is, it had such lovely imagery..you are gifted, very much so:)

    Well done, well done indeed!

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 8 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    I really like the title Tangerine Dawn as well as the images you have drawn...good job with this form...you did well!

  • 8 years ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Hello

    The fact that you attempt strict poetry forms such as this one is credit to you.

    I'm not sure if this would help?

    Across tangerine horizon,
    as dawn stirs remnant mignight hues,
    shimmering curls of golden yawn,
    wrap silent shadows, in pursue.
    ^
    use the dawn to finish the first line that will rhyme with 'yawn'
    'Sweeping zest of tangerine dawn'

    Then 'stirs the remnants of midnight hues'

    Daffodils sway with lively charms,
    feathered colors fly over moor,
    cuddling embrace of breezy arms,
    bewitching - a new morn's allure.
    ^
    Daffodils sway their lovely charms. *This would add to the needed plural.

    I hope this is helpful, or at least aids the thought process.

    Well done

    Michael