Comments : Things to do.........

  • 12 years ago

    by Sparkling snow flake

    Nice poem!
    short and sweet

  • 12 years ago

    by TiredOfWaiting

    Thanks... :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Mello193

    Think of you,just like a thing I must do everyday.
    Falling in Love With you,just like a thing that god gave me to do.
    But,
    Forget you,is the only thing i wanna to do Now...
    I leaving you now... Bye.......</3

    yes short and sweet indeed, however i thought the broken heart and unnecessary periods were well entirely unnecessary. no rhyme scheme to see here, nor coherent flow. again with editing and every other critique Ive given, could have potential. i feel like the first part of the sentence should be last, and well maybe you should look more into reading poetry to get a firm grasp. seems like you have a story to tell and your struggling to find those words. keep it going~