Diamond in the Dark

Luanne
Once again you have penned a beautiful piece.
Excellent job!
Love Cindy

Bravo.

The ending...I LOVE IT!!
I have terribly missed reading your poetry and you always prove to me you are just as good as always =)
I love the word "dearest" in poetry, to me it shows no ordinary emotions, it is deep!
Lovely penned honey =) You can say I'm back here, but only reading/writing/commenting..not in clubs nor forums..

Miss you <3

Dearest,
lead me not by fraying strings

Be it that a puppeteer's fool,
dangles hopelessly
by illusions of passion.

^^
I can truly understand these words, and the emotions behind them, a sad result of being around long enough to know better than to believe in fairy tales..nevertheless..I do believe all of us have one person meant for us, but that person is imperfect, as we all are:)

Well done, crazy chickie, I never would have guessed this was your work:)

5/5 Ingrid

I love the title..very catchy and poetic..
I feel llike this poem is so familiar (gd sign ) ..or that you have wrote it in a way that many ppl can relate to it ( even a better sign :P )

Dearest,
see me not as foolish
^^^I just loovee these lines..love this opening..

Be it betrayal
brings face, of a thousand smiles
yet a million lies.

^^deep wording, not lines that we usually see..i would suggest taking off the comma b4 of..i read it without it..and the pace was really better.. or place one after smiles.. stopping there gave me a gd impact as well.

II.

Dearest,
hear me not as an echo
^^I looove this one..very inspiring..and i got thoughts for a totally new poem..when I reached it

Be it that water
seemingly silent, may flow
sensually with power.

^^very strong Luanne..very strong..
I have no idea from where you bring these expressions..u have such a creative mind. I love that (me like you) bring up nature , to serve your messages.

III.

Dearest,
touch me not with feeble words
(again..i love the lines that you are wording over here...u have no idea how much inspiring)

Be it that solitude, brings
no promise upon the horizon
of a drowning soul.
^^very touchy, tender, and deep. I sighed as well...the words are so close for the soul..I love your..emotional side

IV.

Dearest,
lead me not by fraying strings

Be it that a puppeteer's fool,
dangles hopelessly
by illusions of passion.
^^^i love the word u used..was new for me..and dangles as much as the word passion are some of my favorites to read in a poetry.
>and u used them in a very creative way.

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V

Dearest

Our destiny -
Be it not, a diamond
in the dark ...

^^really really if u take a diamond down beside in the dark,,to be one complete line..it would have a gr8test impact..cause WOOOOOW..our destiny ?..how i love love love the way u kept that for the very last words by you!!

a brilliant piece..nothing nothing at all that is ever off, when reading your poems!

5/5 definitely