Comments : Bird On The Wing

  • 7 years ago

    by Jad

    A interesting poem. I don't believe I have ever read a poem about when the birds migrate and I have to say you did a fine job with it. There were some descriptions in this piece that made it nice and also the emotions of sadness at the end made a good ending but as the last line indicates, there will always be a meeting again. Anyway the rhyming in parts I thought were forced but when you are rhyming that is ,most of the time, hard to not do. I have tons of trouble with it myself. The overall poem as a whole was really good. Great job and keep writing.

  • 7 years ago

    by celia stock

    Thankyou Jad. i appreciate you taking time to comment on my rhyme. celia

  • 7 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    A very nice write about a bird's migration, it's something interesting as well as different. Like Jad said, I too have not read a poem about birds' migration. It goes to show that birds too are like us humans who have to do what they have to do to survive. Well written and congrats on the win :)

  • 7 years ago

    by Angie

    First, Congrats on the win, job well done... Second, I truly enjoyed this piece, it's beautifully written and puts such a pretty picture in your mind as you read... it is sad to see them go each year but wonderful to see (and hear) them come back again... well done Celia, keep writing!