Over These Walls

As I read this I felt like a person trapped within an unbreakable wall where pain and sadness consumes oneself..a very strong write of sadness...take care.

Insecure, I'm trapped inside myself,
falling with no end
screaming to no avail.
I can feel it inside
my will is starting to bend.

^I would place a dash after 'inside' you really need a pause here. Also you don't need 'is' before starting, without it it still flows nicely, if not better.

Definitely a depressing piece here but pretty well written. I love how you've managed to create kind of your own style and structure when it comes to your poems , you definitely improve with each write in vocabulary, i've been noticing!

Jad,

Wall are built to keep outside from coming in but there come a time when these walls become a prison that we can't out of ourselves.

Well Done
Ron

Austin a very depressing poem full of dispair and pain.

Over pressured, I start to break as
the lines of fracture widen,
pouring my heart out yet
it spills into an empty abyss,
lost in darkness blinded.

You might want to place a comma after the word darkness to create a pause...or you could start that line with
blinded lost in darkness.
Just a suggestion.
Great job an emmotion packed piece.
*hugs
Cindy

There was a few things in this poem that were a little cliche, like falling with no end and words like fracture and blinded. But they do create feeling and there is emotion in the poem, but not the most original. Its quite good but Ive read many similar to it. The ending I like, as you bring in a new element that all seems fine, and that you are putting up walls to the outside world. This adds to the depth and it wasnt what I was expecting from the ending. Keep writing