Austin, I could see an ink pen poised over paper with the ink, black blood if you will, dripping from the nib. Finally the hand holding the pen moves and words appear on the paper revealing your deepest feelings and emotions. Very original to use black blood for the ink. Well done.

Your poems are so powerfully written Austin and always leave an impressiion. This one did as that of a poet expressing his deepest heartfelt emotions through his poetry... Loved the opening lines also...

" black blood" so unusual and profound, I love it :)

Also...
"Finally a drip sustains
an ending to my insanity"

Powerful write Austin,, so well written & expressed!

(Guess whose poem I'm voting for this week? ;) )

Keep up the Great work!! :))

Or tears spilled but maybe
a release from my captivation
of being so imperfect.
^the word 'maybe' seemed very awkward here,
maybe you could say... '...tears spilled, or perhaps a release from my captivation of being so imperfect.' also, you may not even need 'so' I don't think thats the most poetic word one can use, of course you're looking for emphasis here to show how imperfect you feel you are.

Unraveling emotions,
these words
transfix on perfection, yet
linger on fallacy, seeping
into untold amount of verses.

^I would change transfix to 'transfixed' and then i'd take out 'amount of' I don't feel you need it really. I did however aside from those two things really love this stanza.. it was the strongest of the three - the punctuation was head on and the words fit nicely together.

A rather strong ending - I guess I didn't really pay attention to the title after I read the poem, made it even more interesting. A nice job.

Black blood-
written words from my heart
or tears spilled or possibly
a release from my captivation
of being so imperfect.
^^
Really like the insertion of "black blood"
Black blood is normally old blood ... so the insertion here gives the reader the feeling that the writer held much pain, for quite a long period of time.

Very strong ending, with great word choices !
adequate but lacking
^^
Like that!

I really enjoyed reading this. Short yet powerful.

The only little problem I see with this write is .. the title just doesn't hold up to the content.
Really could use something that screams "look at me"

Great read Jad !

..raw and real and effective..
.......I can Feel it........

I like the title as well as the depth of this write. I feel a deeper emotion with each stanza..a heart tugging write..take care.

Austin
Very deep feelings come from your words in this piece. So many feelings can be released from the pen
Great job!

What a technique you have for writing . I enjoyed this poem, it speaks to me in ways I won't try to explain. What a great theme and your wording is absolutely brilliant

This is amazing, this is fabulously written ..one of the most remarkable poems by you, and worded in the most perfect way.
A coherent piece with original feelings, yet those that many can relate to.--I as one.

I so love the feeling of being imperfect that you expressed at the end of 1st stanza, then made a connection to it by your ending line in the last stanza..
this is mastered.

Black blood-
written words from my heart
or tears spilled or possibly
a release from my captivation
of being so imperfect.
^^^
okat 1st stanza, black blood was not a really powerful opening for your stanza but that really doesn't matter for me because the stanza it self was very strong, and well structured. Sad however, yes sad I really think the release from your captivation of being imperfect IS PERFECT..I so so lovve this..!!

Unraveling emotions,
these words
transfix on perfection,

^^fanatastic, I so love the
condradicted impression that wavers
between these 2 lines and the lines before it..

linger on fallacy, seeping
into untold amount of verses.
^^^wow this is fantastic..very creative austin, the wording is incredible and I love the power of your words here..
brilliaaaaanttttt

Finally a drip sustains
^^i think it's very smart to say a drip..rather than specifying again..a drip of what.
amazing job..Catchy

an ending to my insanity
written mindlessly;
adequate but lacking
everything I've become.
^^^this was very strong, and it left a very huge impact..i feel the loss of your thoughts..and the knowledge of them . Both at the same time, I think you played this poem so well..like all your poetry..
amazing austin..amazingggggggg

5/5