Comments : Still I dream

  • 7 years ago

    by Melpomene

    Yaki,

    I loved how we each had a different interpretation of the image, this poem was quite unique in my eyes.

    Sometimes you astonish me with your strength, I believe that sometimes you are like me, both comedy and tragedy and this was a side that knows to believe in herself.

    I agree with Britt on capitalizing the 'I' in the title.

    A lovely poem that made me smile! Excellent work!

    -Mel

  • 7 years ago

    by Dixiedaisy

    A very powerful poem from start to finish. The title drew me in and the content kept me. I admire the strength you have portrayed here.

    "though my life
    is a constant delirium
    and I no longer know
    what to say,
    what to do
    what to be"

    I think the very last line would be even more powerful if it were "Who to be". I think by stating "what to be" you are comparing it to career choices. You can be anything you want, but with the title and the nature of the poem "Who to be" would impact more of the dreams that MLK held for equality. Now please don't take this as criticism, it is only my opinion. You have penned an absolutely beautiful poem that is very worthy of front page material in my opinion.

    Great Job and I look forward to reading more of your work.

    Take Care,
    Kay

  • 7 years ago

    by Lu

    I love this write for it hold such an uplifting message. No matter the downfalls of the day, there is still hope for a better tomorrow.

    Wonderfully penned Yaki !

    Powerful and most definitely inspirational.

  • 7 years ago

    by Cindy

    Congrats on your win :)
    Take care Cindy

  • 7 years ago

    by debbylyn

    Congrats on the win!

  • 7 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Wow! I absolutely love this poem... It's so inspiring and I've been feeling down so it made me feel better! I really love the meaning of this poem and everything about the title to the structure and the words you've chosen are all perfect... It couldn't have been any better! Congratulations on the win! :) I'm going to favorite this poem !

  • 7 years ago

    by AngelDust

    This is definatly deserving of the win. Congrats miss Yaki. I am so proud of you. I knew it'd happen for you some day. I like the wording you used and your lay out. I enjoyed reading and the subject. Well done!!

    Danika
    xoxox

  • 7 years ago

    by Christopher Wry

    Ah yes the only place we can be whatever we want in a crowd. Well done.

  • 7 years ago

    by Boy

    Great poem.. i wish i could write again these kind of poetry. excellent piece of writing. short, simple words that explain a lot of things. great.
    5/5

  • 5 years ago

    by Steven Beesley

    Very inspirational and very well penned.

    A pleasure to read.

  • 5 years ago

    by Danyell Daniels

    Nice:)

  • 11 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    Inspirational piece! Beautiful.

  • 9 months ago

    by Tara-Kay

    Yaki, in your dreams you can be anything you want to be, you are free of struggles, free of the restraints that daily life has, you are not judged, or excluded, you are you, and you can be whatever you dare dream.
    a beautifully simple piece, such an inspirational write.

    x

  • 8 months ago

    by Mahesh Kachare

    What a great poem

  • 7 months ago

    by nourayasmine

    This is one of my favourites by you. It's so simple and beautiful and inspirational.

  • 2 months ago

    by Nema

    It reminds me so much of Maya Angelou's "Still I Rise"
    Beautiful piece, Yakari. Sorry to have missed it all this time!

  • 1 month ago

    by Nick

    I like the sense of determination that is obtainable from this piece. Though brief, the choice of words are powerful and the meaning is sure to hit home with many folks who will find it easy to relate. An excellent message and inspiring piece.

    Great work!