Comments : Our Sweet Martyrdom

  • 13 years ago

    by lokitaaXti

    - this was a wonderful poem .
    i could feel the emotion and i overall thouqht itt was very well written .
    maybee one or two mistakes but itts still a wonderful write .
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    Shivered Autumn
    Like restless souls in the sky
    With broken thoughts,
    I stand here
    Damned by your malicious lies
    ^^^
    this was my favourite part ,
    itt starts the poem off with deep emotion .

    yu are a very good writer , keep itt upp[:

  • 13 years ago

    by Lynn Anderson

    "this enduring love isn't love anymore" Great statment. Also, I really liked your use of words. 5/5 :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Skyfire

    "I said to my graceful lady / "Dry your tears" / Because I won't dry them / For you anymore." Loved these lines! It takes a common tender saying and imbues it with negative connotations...I liked the reversal. I also loved the line "You have burned my tomorrows." Great image!

  • 12 years ago

    by Poet Keen

    "Don't cry my love
    Don't cry no more"

    I like this sentence

  • 12 years ago

    by mira

    I love it emilio
    i just feel this powerful emotions that you express here
    (don't cry my love)
    well done