Comments : A cleaner brush

  • 13 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    Red for the future of a brighter prospect
    ^I like how you use the color red, typically you'd think of a yellow to describe something bright and full of hope. I think here, you can just say 'Red for a brighter prospect' because essentially a prospect is an outlook for the future, you're just repeating yourself.

    I wish you would have added more colors, perhaps some unique colors like cerulean for blue, or apricot for orange, something original instead of the usual red, purple, blue, yellow, green, you get the idea. I wish you would have continue with the color thing, instead it just stopped and you went to another thought.

    Interesting poem here though.