Comments : Echoes

  • 12 years ago

    by Decayed

    The pace is just awesome!

    To correct the syllab. count, I suggest you change these verses to make them 5 syllab:

    ^^ (Unarmed I stand) --> (Unarmed I do stand)

    ^^ (To hold the breech) --> (Just to hold the breech)

    ^^ (But the freedom of speech) --> (But freedom of speech)

    ^^ (Innocent blood is spilled) --> (Faultless blood is spilled)

    ^^ (Until the echoes gone) --> ('Till the echo's gone)
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    Please take these into consideration! The poem would be perfect :)
    GREAT JOB!

  • 7 years ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    Well done on this. flows really well! Syllable count is spot on!