Dead in the valley of sins
by Samie Jun 19, 2004
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Dead in the valley of sins done all good things i can do now all the sins i committed out of anger and hate i will suffer in the valley of sins dead to the world where no one is allowed to be but my sinful friends as well, i will die in the valley of sins a rock on place which is the right world for me to be, a good torturous place, where we are free to touter our self's a great place to die more then once |
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11 months ago
by Ink
Hi there, I really like the content of this poem, very strong images and I like the repeating phrase too, my only criticism really is the layout, I think that it would make a huge difference to separate the lines somewhat to highlight the valley of sins, sometimes when we do this it allows the reader to truely absorb what was written. However, we all have our own styles it was just a though. Regards Ink.
