Nature's Hues (Haiku)

I love haikus and I have written some. I love the color description of 'mustard' and for me earth's limbs is fine. I can see the picture very well.

I understand TS125's comment and it does make sense also, except that he can't leave a suggestion, hehe. He termed it incomplete but I say the appropriate word to describe it is "open".

You can simply change "casting dingy clouds" to "dingy clouds casted" to leave a strong impression. It appears "closed" with that.

Yay, here I am giving suggestions. Hehe. Thanks, Joe.

Mustard rays what a different description , liked it made this very original
Haiku's are one of the hardest to write and paint a picture of natures beauty. You did a great job
Connie

Beautiful! How you opened up with "mstard rays" rays" was brilliant! Such a powerful metaphor, and truly original. I apreciate all formed poetry, especially the haiku form, I have much respect for. Much enjoyed.
Take care

Mustard rays grazing
reflecting against Earth's limbs,
casting dingy clouds.

i dont have a huge stomach for haikus, there are a select few that i really like. i agree with some of the other comments, the images conveyed are... 'gross' but not necessarily in a bad way, this quality seems to be what youre getting at, the earth is gross at the same time as it is beautiful perhaps?i could easily be mistaken.

it seemed... incomplete? thats not the right word, i saw, heard, felt many images in this haiku, but none of them seemed complete persay, i dont know if that makes sense. as if i were looking at the whole story through a series of view master images, the images (metaphorically speaking) arent bad by any means, they simply are not the whole story.

i cant write haikus to save my life, so i dont know what advice to give, but this concept certainly has potential.

5/5 for experimentation's sake

A truly unique haiku, the color and atmosphere of "earth's limb" was well-used and played into the imagery of those mustard rays...carefully picked words/verbs that gave an intense description. Such brightness!

God bless :)
~MaryAnne