Cataclysm.

What a big risk you took with a rhyming poem and I have to say I am not disappointed. You really got a strong emotional pull in the poem and also had a good flow with the rhyming and it didn't seem forced whatsoever. The emotions are what really get to the reader I think. You have a really strong emotional sadness in this poem and I find it greatly to my liking. The imagery was also good even though you didn't focus a lot on it. I did like the mention of the Eiffel tower though. Got a strong picture in my mind to see everything.

I didn't really like one stanza over the other. They both had specific things that made each one special.

Overall, you did a splendid job with this poem and the rhyming really helped the flow and since there was no forcing in the process I really like how it all went down. I can't wait to read some more of your awesomeness and don't ever lose that edge you have that puts your heart into the poem and really gets emotions out. Great job and keep writing.

Super interesting title, and incredible poem...Eiffle Tower scene is one I'd like to experience one day!

The part about roulette was really intriguing, basically letting readers know this was a game, but one she wanted to take....crazy things love will make one do!

Very nice piece temps!

A roulette of risk yet one she was willing to take,
as she weaved courage into her dreams before too late

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This here was my favorite part..
Weaved courage into dreams « really clever thinking!
This poem is so full of sensetivity...it was complex..but not too complex which made it perfect
The layout is somewhat unusual but lovely and the way the second stanza started with the last word of the first was nice! I do that too! I love it!

Overall a nice job ! Intersting title as well!

-many hugs!

Wow, very well written sweets. I like the lay out, structure and words that you used. This is well penned. It gives the reader a profound feeling whilst reading it. That's how I felt, anyway. This is very well done. It pulled me and has left me with some emotion. Brilliant.

Danika
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