Comments : Waterfall

  • 12 years ago

    by Brittany C

    I liked this poem. There is only one thing that I would suggest changing.

    "To stop the waterfall from my eyes."

    you might rewrite as

    "To stop the waterfall" I don't think that the part "from my eyes is needed because we already know where it will be coming from.

    other then that it was great and flowed good.
    5/5