Man. I have told you already my opinion about this piece, that is totaly a poem to be enjoyed from depth , to meaning, to word choice.

Strong structure and great punctuation, the title makes you definitely wonder!

when we care a lot about someone, then its not such a surprise that they win on us.. fights..discussions..everything and especially if we are the one drowning in our emotions..it would be so hard to manipulate things our way

You latch onto my heart
speaking recycled rubbish

^^
that was a very strong opening Jacey,
and I seriously loved using latch...
and how to speak recycled rubbish, it's very interesting

once more
as I swoon at the feet
of temptation,
^

wonderful imagination, I enjoyed this a LOT, it's just fantastically thought of, I give you credit for spacing as well.
Well done

for belief of artificial emotion
has hazed knowledge

^

its such a wonderful expression to reflect the way your feeling and the things ur trying to believe in,
hands up! well done, appluads!

yet still,
defeats my actions
like many times before.

^
simple but well said , and couldnt be said any better, yess still defeating the actions by the
power we give them..
wonderful

Will I too be salvaged
like frayed phrases worn
on your lips

^^^
this gave me chiiiiilllllllssssssss...
must be my favorite part, very strong for a closing stanza, its just incredible, I am in love
with this ending stanza.. wonderful jacey

only to be used again
in future?

^^
perfect..am out of words..and speechless, it's just as good and as effective as Kilimanjaro!!
I cant even stop talking..

FIVE! if only i have

^ Dang! Nana is on a roll, she sure has some words just bouncing off of her! What inspiration :)

"You latch onto my heart"

I don't know why I liked this opening phrase so much, it is just the imagery of pulling for so long, and then this man finally keys into your desire and you have that interlocked passion- and ultimate connection.

"speaking recycled rubbish
once more"

I loved the use of alliteration, the idea of recycled words that have been used so many times over and over, they hold no meaning, is intriguing....and that you use this message to convey that false sense of hope.
How "once more" he beguiles you it seems...interesting words!

"as I swoon at the feet
of temptation,"

What an impact with these eight words..."swoon" had that fire you hold and the temptation allure gave subtle dark hints.

"for belief of artificial emotion
has hazed knowledge
yet still,
defeats my actions
like many times before."

Okay, those two lines really great thought....believing emotion that will never go far in reality keeps covering up true knowledge....and blocks out the real truth of your actions....this was just haunting, like something is pulling you back. this whole idea wow!

"Will I too be salvaged
like frayed phrases worn
on your lips
only to be used again
in future?"

You tie this idea of being "salvaged" so well, that you will never be fully regained...only used again, recycled without care.

When I read this the first time before commenting, I loved your use of "frayed phrases", really cool how it flows with the tongue. The question was chilling at the end and you gave the reader that thought again if you will ever be saved from such delusions of the mind & heart.

Brilliant write, so powerful.

God bless you and hope you are well in this rainy weather!
~MaryAnne

"You latch onto my heart
speaking recycled rubbish
once more
as I swoon at the feet
of temptation,"

^^Okay. I absolutely frigging LOVE this! This is so beautiful, such original and unique wording, that creates such wvivid imagery, and pulls me right in. I adore the first two opening lines!
"for belief of artificial emotion
has hazed knowledge
yet still,
defeats my actions
like many times before."

^^Here, you continue on with so much emotion and depth in such few words, and I found this to be getting stronger and stronger throughout the poem.

"Will I too be salvaged
like frayed phrases worn
on your lips
only to be used again
in future? "

I really like these closing lines..so powerful and hard hitting, and the last two lines really hit the reader.

I loved this, I found it to be so meaningful and full of so much emotion, while the flow, content and imagery were beautifully written.

I LOVE this.

Temps,

I was a little suprised by 'speaking recycled rubbish' it took me off the poem for a second but once I realized what was being said and that is does actually make sense I found it really interesting.

I wasn't too keen on artifical emotion, I just hate the word artifical it has been used too much but that's just personal opinion and I'm being biased lol. Just didn't like the way it sounded in the poem. Too stiff compared to your usual word choice that is bitter sweet. Artifical seems almost robotic to me and didn't work with the tone.

The emotion is deep in the poem like always. I adore the emotional impact you are able to leave upon me.

Liked frayed prhases that was quite a clever play on words, made it seem as though you used alliteration.

A lovely poem.

You have a way with words, you have picked the right ones to create imagery, and a new meaning to common things. nice job

Love, it's crazy how it can be a double edged sword. Especially when you think you've found the one...and even though things fall to pieces, you can't help but stay. Your words took the cover off a dark truth.

I only noticed one thing about your very last line, "in future?" I wasn't sure if you meant to put a "the" in there or not.

But this is truly a brilliant piece of work, a pleasure read. Take care

Temps
I always love reading your writing. They always seem to bring me to tears. This one is so sad to just let yourself be hurt over and over again. Then to come back for more :(

Will I too be salvaged
like frayed phrases worn
on your lips
only to be used again
in future?

This ends the piece nicely. Brings tears to the eyes of the readers. It is so hard to think of someone offering theirself over and over to pain and heartache.
Great job!
Love Cindy

I'm not gonna write you a novel but I will say I loved the first line. I could image some guy trying to say he's sorry to you and you're like go away lol. Such powerful thoughts in so few words very great indeed. You're writing has changed so much and it's a talent to be admired. Keep writing. -Nik