Comments : Lying Words

  • 12 years ago

    by Sunshine

    JAD...you ache me..this is just as all your work, my new favorite lmao!
    ANYWAY I love how you say writers block yet you shoooot some of the very inspiring lines! One which I will need to borrow..

    Sometimes we say we were blind, just cause someone lied, but I would like 2 correct for you, being in need of a love that seemed so true..doesnt mean we were silly or blind ..its those who ACT so perfect who are blamed..and I have learned that even when it aches so much..call it an experience :) rather than a lost love that seemed too fake at the end of the day ok! :D

    You set me on fire
    only to burn our memories,

    ^
    amazing..very sad..makes me think of
    the gd side..some memories are not meant
    to stay forever :)

    but I know your a liar
    ^
    you're (correct it :D :P )

    so I'll freely forget you and me.
    ^
    wats so sad here, is forgetting being the hardest step!

    Forgetting how to breathe, I let you go
    and moving on I fall back down,

    ^
    ve4ry veyr strong lines, I am fond of these strongggg..touchy emotional lines of yours! wow..just wow..sounds how imp this person used to be!

    LOVE it

    but I'm so naive not to know
    your standing above me in scorn.
    ^
    sarcasm..a great element for the state of inner anger that ur living..through thsi part..very wise.

    Fading into tomorrow, I die.
    ^
    that's IT..please lol i wanna write a poem on this line?? :D LOVE IT very very thoughtful!

    So go ahead and take my heart
    because all along we were a lie
    only a dream turned into a nightmare.

    ^tho am in love with how emotional this ending is..let me give u a friends note..dont give away ur heart when u are living these 3 moments

    "1)1st sigh love
    2)when in anger
    3)when hurt"

    When you are living these peaks of emotions...
    keep ur heart for urself :) yaa ull need it again..even when u think not!

    5/5555 LOVE this,,

  • 12 years ago

    by BlueJay

    For writer's block this really is amazing. I'll simply say excellent job, but I'll leave a real comment later... not that one is needed, cause so much has already been said, but oh well.

    5/5

    MRK