Comments : Yakari

  • 12 years ago

    by Melpomene

    Lu,

    This was a lovely poem, Yaki's heart should be swelling every time she reads this. It is a great way to depict such a beautiful girl. You have a kind heart and it shines within this poem, not that it doesn't always. This challenge was great and you did an elegant and motherly job of portraying your feelings for her.

    "A beautiful flower
    with her face to the sun
    and her back to the wind."

    This was my favorite part of the poem, it was emotive and showed how far Yaki has come. I thought the idea of her face to the sun and back to the wind was excellent symbolism for strength. Your tone as always was what caught my attention, you spoke with such sincerity and it touched my heart.

    Great write and even better read as always.
    -Mel.

  • 12 years ago

    by Jenna Bella Oldridge

    I found this read to be interesting because sometimes its hard to put into words how you feel about a friend espeacially when you have never met that friend in person but I feel you did a great job with this piece and I agree with Mel when she said yaki's heart should be swelling everytime she reads this.

    You really did a good job here

    5/5

    Jenna Davies

  • 12 years ago

    by Yakari Gabriel

    Damn you LU,you made me cry....this poem has touched me in so many ways...you really made me feel special! LOVE YOU SO MUCH MAMA<3....you're the best!!! Forever reading this poem over and over again...!

  • 12 years ago

    by Britt

    You have a gift of writing about people who inspire you, touch you, or that you feel deeply about, and this is no exception. It seems your closest friends and people to you are the easiest thing for you to write about :)

    "A beautiful flower
    with her face to the sun
    and her back to the wind."

    This is GORGEOUS poetry, Lu. Beautifully written about a beautiful person. This fits Yaki so well, it's incredible. Very touching!

  • 12 years ago

    by Beautiful Chaos

    Very lovely Lu, I enjoyed it.

  • 12 years ago

    by Yakari Gabriel

    Never getting over this..

    omfg
    how I love you<3

  • 11 years ago

    by Yakari Gabriel

    Sometimes when I need a smile, I just come to this.

  • 9 years ago

    by Yakari Gabriel

    <3

  • 9 years ago

    by Yakari Gabriel

    <3

  • 9 years ago

    by Yakari Gabriel

    <3

  • 6 years ago

    by Yakari Gabriel

    On my hard days, i visit this poem. Thank you so much for writing me this Lu

  • 4 years ago

    by Yakari Gabriel

    <3