Comments : That day...

  • 12 years ago

    by Sparkling snow flake

    This is a nice poem as your first poem :)
    I like the part where you said that they make your fears fly away it was a nice piece of imagery that I can relate to :)
    keep it up!

  • 12 years ago

    by vip

    Thank you so much i hope you enjoyed it

  • 12 years ago

    by Sparkling snow flake

    I did!

  • 12 years ago

    by vip

    Thnk you a lot!

  • 12 years ago

    by Katie

    I like it! (:

  • 12 years ago

    by nouriguess

    What I look for in a poem is the emotion, and only the emotion, not the structure nor the flow even, if there is a feeling expressed, then nothing ever else matters! This poem was so full of emotions and because of this, I'll rate it 4 :)

    You are a very promising poet, hope to see more from you. ;)

  • 12 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    I think poetry has to be an overall structure not just emotion though emotions need to be a factor.

    I liked your layout and the concept of what you were trying to say, emotions ran deep. over all You did a great job for a first timer lol I wish I could show you my first:-) Keep it up bro, your talents will aspire as you continue to write