Comments : Premonition

  • 12 years ago

    by Brookexox

    I like it....sometimes dreams are scary...but they tell a story. the poem caches your attention, exspecially the way you've rhymed it. Excellent.

  • 12 years ago

    by Britt

    That is such a creepy and eerie dream! Isn't it amazing what our brain comes up with while we are sleeping? This does also sound like something you could be doing, too. I love the story and the outline, you nailed the descriptions so well that I felt I was there right along side you, out on a country farm.

    I don't typically like rhyming poems but this had such perfect rhythm I almost didn't notice it rhymed until I read through the second time. Awesome, awesome job!! :)