Comments : Her Constellations

  • 12 years ago

    by Daisy if you do

    Mel,
    You may not have made the contest in time but this is a winner for sure. Every line depicts two young souls (sisters) taking on life in their adventures. You describe Nor so easily, and manage to do the same with yourself. Absolutely awesome write, as usual. You have a tendency to grasp the readers attention with your wisps of detail. Beautiful write.

  • 12 years ago

    by The Princess

    Twin,

    First, I agree with Kay wholeheartly. Second, You have no idea how this poem is dear to me (for selfish reasons I know!) I love how both of us are in there, I adore the way you've put in different conversations and thoughts that we've shared all along the years (bits and pieces of us) and of course, the way you've penned it all.

    My favorite lines (If I could pick ones) would be:

    ''We'd find landscapes
    in each other''

    Probably because it sums it all. I love you, Yin.

  • 12 years ago

    by Britt

    "chastising my taste
    of romance while
    placing herself
    amongst carriages,
    ball gown beaded
    with cinnamon and"

    This sounds SO much like Nor it tickles me. I love this poem! You've wrapped the essence of yourselves and your friendship so neatly around every word. I know you could probably have kept going for hours, but as is now this is absolutely gorgeous poetry.

    I love the end of yin and yang for your thumb prints!! How creative and clever that is! I love, love, love this! You have such a creative brain in there, Mel. Beautiful!

  • 12 years ago

    by Yakari Gabriel

    Mel-boo..

    This poem...
    Screams NOR to volumes...
    The part about the hair..

    I pictured both of you sitting
    Like sisters
    Playing with each others hair..
    giggling and eating cookies..

    I agree with nor,
    The part about 'landscapes'
    Was without a doubt the best..
    Somehow,I imagined you
    painting a kangaroo for her,
    While she described the history of the pyramids..
    Eh?..

    This poem is so so so beautiful..

    Classy and elegant..
    Like the two of you..

    And the part of 'gretel and gretel'
    A little too well thought!

    Amazing poem!
    Congratz on the win!!

    Mwaaa!

  • 12 years ago

    by Ares

    I don't know anyone of those who have commented thus far, or Nor for which this poem was intended, but I love this poem. It's sweet, descriptive, but most importantly, the words speak to me in a way I've not experienced in a while. Not since I first read Frost or Kerouac have I felt this kind of interest in a poet. It's brilliant, heartwarming and genious!

    From across the world,

    ares

  • 12 years ago

    by StormyStar

    I love this, Im not really sure how to explain it but this is amazing :) 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by StormyStar

    I love this, Im not really sure how to explain it but this is amazing :) 5/5