Comments : Black Roses

  • 7 years ago

    by Rania Moallem

    OMG..must be the best by you I've ever read..and how i wish to be able to nominate 1000! OMG, this must be on of the newest freshest poems,,and am sure u are proud of it!

    I LOVE this,just cant find words to tel u how much I think this was creative and i had suggestions 2 give bout capitalizing something but wow..am busy being blown away!

    5/5 am gna ask everyone i know 2 read this!!

  • 7 years ago

    by Rania Moallem

    For I seek not,
    the warmth of sunlight
    nor the joy of sunflowers.

    ^^

    I wanna say the F word!! :P

  • 7 years ago

    by Meme

    Black Roses, you swept me away by the title itself ..

    This is one of the best poems I have read in a quiet sometimes ..

    I just love it, cant even express how much ..

    OMG !!! you write epically :)

    5/5

  • 7 years ago

    by nourayasmine

    WTF!!!!!!!!
    !!!!

    Yakkkzzz, you have nailed a masterpiece, I loved it, darkness, sadness purity and everything just LOVES it, honny that was perfect by all means...and if I had any left nomination this would be right away nominated but sadly I used them all...:(

    but in my eyes, this is a winner...and you should be proud of it :) five!

  • 7 years ago

    by Beautiful Chaos

    Wow Yak! Great work, I really loved this, you have grown so much in your writing, what a wondeful read.

  • 7 years ago

    by Decayed

    I felt a rush of dark emotions when I read it...

    The best thing was the TITLE :p .. I felt I was going to hear an Evanescence or Avril Lavigne song!

    And it turned out to be a very strong poem.
    Filled with incisive feelings and intensive thoughts.

    GREAT

  • 7 years ago

    by Kiko

    This is a wonderfully dark write. I especially like "the wounded truth." That's great metaphor..

    I believe you could improve the flow by losing the commas and that the singular, "lays," should be plural... either "lies" or "lay."

  • 7 years ago

    by Jennah Bella

    This poem stunned me. It really carried a lot of feeling. I liked the poem from start to end and can find no falt what so ever.

    really weldone

    5/5

  • 7 years ago

    by Chelsey

    WOW Yaki this was just amazing!!

    for I seek not,
    the warmth of sunlight
    nor the joy of sunflowers..

    But,
    the wounded truth
    and the eerie darkness
    that lays inside the most
    virgin emotions in you..

    ^^ My favorite part..totally opposite of what you think a person would want to receive.. Just loved these stanzas so much!!
    I do not fancy
    rainbows and butterflies
    unless...
    they are placed
    in eyes of children.

    ^^ This was also amazing...I felt like it showed the person speaking was not totally heartless, that there was an ounce of positivity in this poem.

    so bring to me,
    your sickest regret.

    ^^ Awesome ending!! I hate dark poems, but I love your work, and I just loved this!!

  • 7 years ago

    by Nevi

    "for I seek not,
    the warmth of sunlight
    nor the joy of sunflowers..

    But,
    the wounded truth
    and the eerie darkness
    that lays inside the most
    virgin emotions in you.."

    This entire poem was a masterpiece. but THIS right here, really touched a chord in me. Maybe it's because I'm having a little emotion thing myself right now. But those lines, I felt like they were written in my own heart, and you found a way to take those feelings, and make them something palpable. Amazing poem 5/5