I love your wording it, and it was spectactical, lol. i loved the ryhme and flow, and it was like you painting a picture on the stem of my brain burning the image just smoking away. and I love every word of it. a 5/5 indeed, and it reached me.

From AJ

Wow, just when I thought your last entry was brilliant, I think this is more brilliant. Totally love the picture that you have painted with your words. There are so many stanzas that stood out for me but I love the way you describe this:

Footfalls sink gently into a soft
mantle of manicured grass
dotted in decorative stones

I mean the imaginary here is just awesome.

A metaphoric piece that ends with a final goodbye.Nice:)

Well connie your showing your talents great flow the way u have worded this piece is stunning

really amazing write 5/5 lets see if u can beat this amazing write :)

You do a really good job at setting the mood with your vivid descriptions of a scene at a cemetery, from the point of view of the newly deceased occupant.

As for critique, "scared" should be "scarred." I would also get rid of the periods, since you seem to use them randomly, and the few you use, seem to interrupt the flow.

I would eliminate this line, because the reader already knows someone died, and it is not necessary to say it:
"blanketing the newest occupant."

Actually, after having read this a couple of times, it is not clear that this is from the point of view of the deceased. I think you could rewrite it a bit to help clarify that.

Overall, a really nice write from you. :)

A hard subject to write about but you pulled it off, a very well written descriptive poem, 5/5

Perfect

Honestly, I like so much these descriptive verses you structured well here :)

It's somehow complicated, but I managed!

Amazing.

Wow...very touching. I enjoy what you have just enough of the abstract in your poems. beautiful and sad. 5/5