Changing With The Weather

by Tammie   Aug 1, 2011


The light shined brighter than it had in weeks,
But the rain came hard when the sun fell down,
I wonder what you were thinking when you changed the pace,
Running 'round in circles pointing fingers at everyone else

I fell down with the ash from your last cigarette
And woke up to the sound of your car,
I haven't seen you in seven months or more
And with the end of candles brings sadness

Tv shows and old movies still remind me of past nights
Sitting together not knowing what would happen so fast
The day was filled with rain and all i can see is the smile on your face
But all I can remember is the feeling of my heart breaking in half

You changed like the weather on a hot summer day
Like the sun, you were there and then you were gone
Without a thought to the clothes on the washing line
You rained down and tore everything apart.

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  • 11 years ago

    by Xanthe

    Oh, wow. This piece is amazing. It is hard to understand the 'mood swings' of other people, and I can't understand why this piece have no rates or comments.
    The imagery is awesome from the very beginning "The light shined brighter than it had in weeks,
    But the rain came hard when the sun fell
    down,"---the contrasting lines work really well. Nicely penned.
    "And with the end of candles brings sadness
    Tv shows and old movies still remind me of past nights"--Change brings to bring.
    --The whole piece gives off a sad atmosphere and I only wished you didn't use the word 'sadness' here. I'd rather you used some other adjective, perhaps? You shouldn't give away too much as the imagery is already very vivid, and in my opinion, 'sadness' is quite very plain and over-used for this masterpiece.
    The ending lines: Really well-written. Completes the whole piece. It's like the persona is angry or blaming this person with sudden mood changes, but sadly, we can do nothing about the "changes of the weather" Awesome write. Keep writing :)
    -X

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