Comments : Pearl

  • 12 years ago

    by Kiko

    I haven't a clue what this is about, yet it's still a beautiful poem that carries a deep emotional resonance.

    I find the first stanza to be a bit clumsy, because the subject seems to be left out, whereas the last two stanzas flow effortlessly and have subjects and objects (in addition to beautiful language.)

    Overall, this is very beautifully penned!

  • 12 years ago

    by Kiko

    Sorry, I meant "predicate" not "object."

    What I was trying to say is that the middle part of the first stanza seems to be lacking a subject, because the subject in the first part is the "air" and the "breezing wilderness" is the subject in the third part. What or who is traveling along an asphalt avenue of lights...?

  • 12 years ago

    by Cinnamonspice

    Very beautiful. I love the imagery and the colors you penned. I'm a sucker for a color theme in poetry.

    Connie

  • 12 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    What a beautiful imagery ... really enjoyed reading it :)

  • 12 years ago

    by BlueJay

    This is interesting and very creative. The imagery is awesome, the theme is really cool. There us a flow and an amazing word choice. The author's voice is really very clear, and I think that this piece is excellent..

  • 12 years ago

    by xoxShorteexox

    Yeah, this poem required a lot of thinking on my part. I love poems that require a lot of thinking sometimes because then you're searching for a deeper meaning that sometimes only few can find.

    5/5

    -Heather

  • 12 years ago

    by christopher

    Colm this poem is confusing. depth of this poem has turned into confusion and that simplicity us mortals search for is missing, nevertheless the colour and smells are uplifting and reassruing, i feel you got lost somewhere through the centre of this poem.