Comments : Trials Of Faith

  • 6 years ago

    by believeinlove87

    Wow girl.... effing LOVE it (: <3.
    Your scared but wanting only him, i can relate to this,made me think of someone lol. Love is amazing,but hurts more then anything,if its worth the risk take it, if not you knew it would be nothin but a heartbreak. love it girl
    5/5

  • 6 years ago

    by Roses and lilys

    It is a good poem. Nicely worded and is a good length.

    gave it a 5/5

  • 6 years ago

    by LoVerSLaND

    Thank you for the comment. Means a lot to mem I can relate to the lost love of life with this poem. Still trying to get over him. .5/5

  • 6 years ago

    by average thoughts

    Wow..kristian..just as beautiful as u..loved every single word of it..so well written..every line is dipped in emotions..there r lines that r breathtaking..
    I always adore and admire such writes n d person behind it..i wnt to gv more bt sry bt i hv only 5 stars..

  • 6 years ago

    by Larry Chamberlin

    Well done. Like a flower opening to the sun, this poem shows you being drawn out by your feelings for this young man. You have crafted it well. I would suggest a few grammatical corrections:

    First, try not capitalizing every new line. It is old school and most poets these days focus on writing verse in constructed sentances.

    "Cuz" is alreight if you are deliberately using the vernacular; "because" is more proper if you are not.

    "Cuz somehow...I'm drawn to you."
    I would eliminate the elipses. If you want to force the reader to pause
    break the line at the desired spot.

    no where = nowhere

    Now that your near
    should be
    Now that you're near

    Good work!

  • 6 years ago

    by Captain Lonesome

    Hey great poem! it can be interpreted in different ways. i may not realy know you, but though your laugh may glow, i am sure it is your smile that shines!! :-)
    keep up the good work!

  • 6 years ago

    by Jawwad Zafar

    Awesome ... love it.. :)

  • 6 years ago

    by Jawwad Zafar

    Awesome ... love it.. :)

  • 6 years ago

    by aanika R I P

    Faith brimming all through ....beautiful piece of work liked t :)

  • 6 years ago

    by anonymous

    100/100 everyone can relate! love to read more

  • 6 years ago

    by Marvellous

    Insecurity, I guess, is a trial demanding faith, to conquer. Interesting craft!