Red Tide of Deceit

by Cinnamonspice   Sep 1, 2011


Tears corroding her strength,
washing away her durability
like waves nibbling at the
shore.

Pieces of a splintered
heart litter pristine
beaches once pure
and white.

Under currant of depression
bittersweet memories begin
pulling her deeper in to the
abyss till she is no more.

Faith was her unexpected
precipitation, trust
the sharp edge of
vulnerability.

His love bankrupt
her fragile spirit.
Leaving a barren shell
colored in emptiness.

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  • 12 years ago

    by Chevalier des Fleurs

    Beautifully written, I love the words you use to describe the girl within this piece. Amazing job.

  • 12 years ago

    by Exostosis

    Pieces of a splintered
    heart litter pristine
    beaches once pure
    and white.

    and

    His love bankrupt
    her fragile spirit.
    Leaving a barren shell
    colored in emptiness.

    Awh! Moving. It is subtle and precisely mature, like ones hands swaying to and fro pouring the heart onto the lines whilst the eyes just gazing.

  • 12 years ago

    by BlueJay

    Amazing job! I love it so so much! I agree with everyone that commented before me because this is absolutely amazing, and there is no reason for me to state the obvious while it has all ready been stated so clearly before

  • 12 years ago

    by Something Diabolical

    Beautifull!
    awesome flow and use of words!

    i wouldnt change a thing!
    5/5 from me

  • 12 years ago

    by average thoughts

    Just everything is good about this poem..and 5 sweets from me too..