Wow.. this poem is really interesting... I can see that it has a lot of underlying meaning, but I really like how portrayed it... I love your metaphors throughout the poem and your choice of words were perfect..
"Untouched by greed, glory, or fame
Unraveled by time, power, or poverty
And closer when his heart it seems
Begins to shatter into shards of misery"
I loved this stanza!!
And the ending was perfect... well done! The only criticism I would have is that I felt the title wasn't totally relevant to the whole poem (just my opinion) but it's your poem and you chose it for a reason =) Well done!