Comments : My Best Poem

  • 6 years ago

    by Meme

    NOMINAAAAAAATION !!!!!!!
    If I can give this all of my votes I would do it in a heart beat.

    God bless you for the "Woman" you are.

    *Hugs*

  • 6 years ago

    by RSJ

    I'm totally speechless.
    it's really hard to figure where your inspiration comes from, but the defiance in your figure is something that you should look out for, and the innocence that this poem shows speak of a person that have been through alot, yet embraces life and its hardships with good-well and a smile to go with.
    you've really said it all in one poem, and i'll be lying if i said this isn't one of the best poems i have ever read.
    it was sooo pure, so vivid, so real, truthful, honest and so worthy of praise.

    I'm in love with your personality, and i couldn't help but smile with each word of defiance in this, you're a warrior,a fighter, not a person that quits easily.and that really builds alot of confidence as we can easily see in your poem.
    please stay that way.

    ^^
    Because I think this is the best
    and purest of all the poems
    ever written, and because
    people consider pale thoughts
    too cliche not to be hidden,
    and clear pain is too weak
    for poems, because they all
    think hurt, love, and anger
    do need metaphors
    to make great sonnets,
    and that simple words
    cannot send great messages,
    like this one, like mine^^

    my god, i can't tell you how much this got to me, these lines alone are worth gold.

    nominated, and i'm really astonished at how mature you can be. you're someone to be proud of.
    5/5.
    god bless you.

  • 6 years ago

    by Yakari Gabriel

    Because I think this is the best
    and purest of all the poems
    ever written and because
    people consider pale thoughts
    too cliche not to be hidden,
    and clear pain is too weak
    for poetry because they all
    think hurt, love, and anger
    do need metaphors
    to make great sonnets,
    and that simple words
    cannot send great messages,
    like this one, like mine

    ^

    OUCH...

    where do I start?
    perhaps telling you that you can not...
    I repeat you can NOT.
    just come to me and say I have a new poem..

    No,
    you have to come me and say...

    "I have a new poem that will cut its way under your soul,I have another piece where I poured the deepest most raw emotions I had inside and dived them into stanzas you can read,I have a latest poem that you were relate to in every single way and you will feel every single word converting into nothing but a group of tears that will be shed in your heart when you read this new poem I am speaking of,I have a new poem that takes its twist and turns and creates an impact in the soul,this poem that does not contained metaphors yet is full of emotions that even somewhat embellished feel like a bee sting and this new poem will put all my other poems to shame,because this poem is so full of truth and pain and memories,this new poem I have will basically send you to the moon and Back,and you'll have to read it one,two even 3 times in a row...because it will capture you in such a way you will not be able to leave the page "

    TELL ME THAT BEFORE OKE RANIA...

    XOXO

  • 6 years ago

    by RSJ

    Captivating
    heartbreaking
    breathtaking
    mind dazzling
    emotional
    and much more.

    please more of this nana

  • 6 years ago

    by Yakari Gabriel

    Where do I start?
    perhaps telling you that you can not...
    I repeat you can NOT.
    just come to me and say I have a new poem..

    No,
    you have to come me and say...

    "I have a new poem that will cut its way under your soul,I have another piece where I poured the deepest most raw emotions I had inside and divided them into stanzas you can read,I have a latest poem that you are going relate to in every single way and you will feel every single word converting into nothing but a group of tears that will be shed in your heart when you read this new poem I am speaking of...,I have a new poem that takes its twist and turns and creates an impact in the corners of your mind ,this poem that does not contain metaphors yet is full of emotions that even somewhat embellished feel like a bee sting and this new poem will put all my other poems to shame,because this poem is so full of truth and pain and memories,this new poem I have will basically send you to the moon and Back,and you'll have to read it one,two even 3 times in a row...because it will capture you in such a way you will not be able to leave the page "

    I EDITED MY COMMENT OKE..THE FIRST ONE HAD TOO MANY SPELLING MISTAKES...I APOLOGIZE...

    SO HERE...

  • 6 years ago

    by Larry Chamberlin

    The title makes such a bold statement that I immediately want to challenge it: "No, this surely is bragging!" Then, reading the poem I am amazed that it is more than best, it is profound in the surest meaning of the word. This poem is your "Thanatopsis," your "Song of Myself."

    First you set forth the twin sources of anguish in your childhood. The abuse and fatherless upbringing that you so haltingly revealed to your friends is now declared for the world to hear, to reckon and to share.

    Yet, rather than allow the poem to be overwhelmed in melancholy, you set boundaries: my childhood bristled with this pain, but it shall not define my future: "because I know endings can always be better than beginnings and a sad opening stanza could lead to a happier closing one."

    This anthem to your love of life is the most exquisite reading that I have seen on this forum. Your belief in yourself is heartening, elevating: "I know my sad poetry comes from a very shining soul..."

    I could say so much more, such as the irony of the title in light of the abused child's need to be "best" to deal with her sense of shame, such as your refusal to allow such debilitating error keep you from recognizing you were the victim, and that you are far beyond being victimized. This poem reveals nuances and layers every time I read it.

    Thank you for your gift, thank you for sharing with us your soul.

  • 6 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This poem makes you a better poet because of the great message you have shared . My words cannot praise it enough

  • 6 years ago

    by Edward D Zurovec

    This My Lady is not only a ray of Hope, but a stream of Sunshine. I think more healing will come to a whole bunch of innocent readers by these most powerful words. I am definately touched by your Poetic words. Touche'
    Because "You", will never find out how much
    "I mean it".
    This last statement made much impact; Implieing I think they are History, dead, gone from your Life.
    Well done Ms Sunshine and
    Peace and Blessings

  • 6 years ago

    by Yakari Gabriel

    I CAN'T GET ENOUGH OF THIS<3

  • 6 years ago

    by nourayasmine

    :O

    HOLYSHITTT........

    i have been writing for a year.....now....ive written 50 poems or maybe more!!!! ive been writing everything i could feel....everything i could imagine.....everything i could see or breathe or find in front of my way! and i have NEVER ever find a single reason to get rid of these complicated words ......or difficult msgs.....until NOW.

    you ARE the woman whom WE the other womans wish to be....you ARE the person whom EVERY single damn person would wish to be.......

    "I" for my part,,,,wish to be as great as you and YES am NOWHERE the poetess....the woman the human being you are Nanaa.....u taught me things....that my mother couldnt....believe me its so damn hard to tell u these words but am telling u them...why?? because you are my best friend and in this write u didnt leave in my eyes a single tear....i suddenly found myself crying without even knowing that am crying! and when i reached the semi orphan part...i felt soooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo the same!!! i relate to this write like HELL

    NOW am totally convinced that its not bout metaphors...nor long words or duno what..its about the emotions nana....you again teach me lessons......u cant help it can u??

    whoEVER knows you ...will for sure think about being like you .....even if it seems impossible....

    impressed......impressed by this write, sistah.

  • 6 years ago

    by Britt

    The first two lines in this poem made it. If that was all the poem said, it'd still be incredible. Those two lines are so inspiring, so serious and so exciting as your friend to see. I love seeing this, the inner strength, it's absolutely amazing.

    The rest of that stanza is shocking and terrifying, with ounces of sadness felt within every letter written. I can't even begin to express the pain it made me feel. It's not where I thought the poem was going. It made you much more vulnerable than you usually are, you've really opened yourself up here for all eyes to see. You can tell that this poem just leaks raw emotion line by line and that you really meant and felt every word you wrote. I love it.

    The second stanza broke my heart, especially the part about pictures were called father. It made me tear up to read, knowing what you've gone through and feeling my own pain as I relate to this piece now. It hit me hard, right to the core.

    I love your third stanza too.. the pain again with the not celebrating fathers day, people running you through the mud and ohh. I love the use of 'tread' here. You have such beauty and sadness, but I see it building up as a sort of strength, like you just won't handle it anymore, you say no to pain.

    "But because I owe it to myself
    I will be a better woman."

    I LOVE THIS PART. I love how you used it more than once, and I love how you used it in just the right places. So striking.

    I thought it was interesting to say people feel they need great words and metaphors for poetry. I think it's true, many people do need that. But here you've written such simplicity. Simple stanzas, easy words, nothing anyone would ever trip over.. but you have the key to amazing writing.. emotion. And no one can take that away from your poetry.

    "a better
    one who doesn't sit five days
    nor five minutes to color her
    faint world"

    I think this is one of my favorite parts in the stanza, in a sense you won't dwell over your words, you spit it out and move on, just like in life, how blunt you are and how you handle people. I adore this.

    Endings can always be better than beginnings, how definitely true this is :) brilliantly written, I may add.

    I think the ending stanza comes to a close perfectly here. I love how you used that you will be a better woman for you. We should all strive to be who we are and want to be for ourselves, and not for anyone else, because then it's just never true. It's never real for us.

    This poem has moved me, and I'm sure a lot of people, in many, many ways. I love your title. I love your words. I love that you're so damn honest in everything you've said. I can't express quite how this poem impacted me, but it did.

  • 6 years ago

    by Yakari Gabriel

    Here for read # 358759791800480181

  • 6 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    This poem is so raw with emotion, and definitely captivating. You have always wrote from true experiences and the rawest of emotion possible. You seem to never have anything to hide, and write for yourself and I think that's really lovely. I know some may not appreciate this poem, because they are knit-picky on how it may not truly be considered a poem but it truly is, just in a different way - like you mentioned towards the end of the poem.

    The one thing about this poem I found so fascinating aside from the general message and emotion, was the emphasis of 'myself' 'I' and 'you'. Your eyes are directed to these words because they do hold so much power next to the message in your poem. I'm truly glad you decided to emphasize them.

    This is beautiful and sad all at once, I think you've left a lot of us speechless. Being someone close to you, these words hit home, as I have listened to you speak of these very important moments and parts of your life that are unforgettable, because they shaped who you are today; they are life changing.

    Honestly however, you say you want to be a 'better' woman. But I think you're already quite beautiful and brilliant inside and out. You have so much strength within you that sometimes you don't exactly show, but I know it's there. You're very intelligent, also. No, I'm not a suck up, it's the absolute truth and I know several people would back me up on this. Well done. :]

  • 6 years ago

    by Yakari Gabriel

    HADDDDD TOOO WIN !!! XOXO

  • 6 years ago

    by Boy

    Aaah. this poem is amazing. this poem is more than a poem. i say. because. i have been writing from many years and i always give the rhyimg and stanza shapes to my emotions. but this poem is really connected direct to your heart. that i can see. its like a waterfall of emotions that i felt.
    its just like i am sitting under waterfall and taking the bath. of the emotions.

    you have proved that we can write best without rhyming any poem. or without making the stanzas etc. its the words that comes from our heart. and those all words have power to describe themselves. good work.

    i also liked your idea. that u made it so simple and full of emotions that touched my heart. i really liked the title of this poem. that's why i open to read that.

    i enjoyed all the poem but the last stanza was my favorite stanza. its so true...

    i wish to write this type of poem one day.. and i want to see more stuff like that from your side.. thanks for sharing this poem with us..
    take care
    Alone

  • 6 years ago

    by Innocent Fairy

    Wow i'm speachless but their could be many words to explain this but dose not come to mind after reading this masterpiece or amazing fanctastic wonderful...idk poem i really loved it and its really amazing :) :) 10/10 20 stars :) :)

  • 6 years ago

    by deaph

    I am deeply touched by what happened to you and the way you express it in your poem it makes sense what you say, really poetry is not about rhyming words to make the best poem.

  • 6 years ago

    by Sungrl And Mrs Whatsit

    A great leap, my Dear...

    Especially:

    ..."people consider pale thoughts
    too cliche not to be hidden"

    Blessings from me here to you there....
    drifting by....'-)

  • 6 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    OMG... I can't believe I just read this poem!!! I wish I read it earlier!!! But I'm speechless....

    This poem is so beautiful yet heartbreaking at the same time.... I loved it... I loved how you expressed yourself... and I loved how you started by saying: "Because I owe it to myself,
    I will be a better woman." and how you ended it with that too... I loved that part

    Wow and I just loved the way you explained what poetry means to you, and how people say clearly stating emotions is cliche etc.. but the truth is, everyone has their own style, and I personally only write poetry for myself, to express my emotions, or something that inspired me... and that's what it's all about in the end. You don't need anyone to tell you your poetry has to be a certain way, because that's your own work of art, and to most of us poets, it's our therapy.

    But for one thing - all of your poems are in the 'best' category, and you always have the best metaphors, so trust me you don't need to be worried about how your poems turn out or anything - they're always amazing and touch me, not just me, but many people!

    Be proud of yourself - this was a very well done poem. Great job and congrats on the win!!! You really deserve it hon!!!! *hugssss*

  • 6 years ago

    by nourayasmine

    Forgot to tell ya....congrats for the very well deserved win ...mwa