Comments : A life, so simple...

  • 12 years ago

    by average thoughts

    I likd d idea of writin d whole poem so simple..u jus used d routine life ..for d idea..5 frm me.

  • 12 years ago

    by Amreen

    Thanx dear...love ya...:))

  • 12 years ago

    by Jenni

    I like the use of repetition because it helps the flow and I like your choice of words. I think you did a good job writing this.

  • 12 years ago

    by Liliana

    This is actually the one i most like about you, you are improving :)

  • 12 years ago

    by BlueJay

    I like this piece, it is a great job. I agree with everyone above.

  • 12 years ago

    by Brittany C

    I liked it. I saw nothing that would need fixing. The wording was good. It was easy to read and understand. You got your point across.

    Gave it a 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Hallucinostic

    This is really good. The way you used the title inside the poem is awesome, repeating it, it gives the poem a song-ish feel, and I love that. One more thing I like is the part where you talked about children, its nothing new but to me, its something awesome. Very good.

  • 12 years ago

    by Rozanna

    This really calmed me down. Beautiful. <3

  • 12 years ago

    by Half Husband Half father

    Awesme it created a scene in front of my eyes while i was reading it

  • 12 years ago

    by Half Husband Half father

    Awesme it created a scene in front of my eyes while i was reading it

  • 12 years ago

    by L

    In a life so simple . . .

    Nice, this is my favorite part:
    The humming melodies of the haywire birds,
    enables me to tap my feet and sing from within,
    keeping me enjoyable in life, so simple...

    But what really caught my attention was the word haywire ... isn't haywire more like out of control? So if the birds are out control then their humming doesn't sound too satisfying as in a melody.( my point of view) i was picturing more like a humming of a love bird. . . relaxing, enjoyable to some extend. :)

    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Owner of an Untamed Heart

    Incredible 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Sorry that it has taken so long to comment. Must have passed my notice.
    Thus now I must as this is masterfully done, the wording simple like this life.
    love the repitition and flow

    a great piece

    love Tara

  • 12 years ago

    by nouriguess

    I agree with everyone above, this was well-done, I liked it. Yes life is so simple, so refreshing and simple.....you moved me with this one, Amo. Love you babe. :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Jess

    This Poem Is Inspiring.
    Something Out It Shouts Happiness.
    If You Know Me At All, You Would Know Thats My Favorite In A Poem.
    Keep Up The Great Work.
    Jessi

  • 12 years ago

    by Giegielove Goddess Poet

    I like this poem of you! Great job! 5/5 from me to you! please rate my poems too. Thank you so much in Advance!

  • 11 years ago

    by Aaron

    Great poem. Absolutely loved the imagery. I adore repetition in poems and the flow of the words is just superb. This poem sums up some of the wonderful things a bout life; excellent!

  • 11 years ago

    by DeviousCharmer

    Truly inspiring, understanding

  • 11 years ago

    by Khalid M Darwish

    I do like simple life away from complication although some times you are face to face with copmlexity and have no other choice than to face it. Simple life makes you live smoothly and have sweet dreams. Comlexity comes from job, children and study responsibilities. I do have some in my life. But even though success comes from you patiency and toleration and some times from the failure itself. Good piece my friend.

  • 11 years ago

    by Marvellous

    Life is simple, when Truth is learned. Great job and thanks for sharing this.