Comments : Hidden darkness...

  • 6 years ago

    by aanika R I P

    Amaaaaaazingly written..... i loved it......

    "Running from satan's torture
    Screaming for strength to move on
    Blood poured from his heart
    Of every word he would think upon"

    such an amazing work must say :)

  • 6 years ago

    by believeinlove87

    I LOVE this(:

    Its different then your usual but very good!
    It flows perfectly, you can see the hatred burning through in your mind. You can feel the agonizing pain.

    With blood on his hands
    And knives in his back
    The demons were around him
    Ready to viciously attack
    -this is one of my favs :)
    strong words!

    Amazing Job
    5/5

  • 6 years ago

    by Innocent Fairy

    Wow great poem,towards the end i wanted to cry...
    No one took the time to ask
    Why he had a blood stained arm
    People ran from his presence
    Fearing that he could harm

    With blood pouring down
    Tears in his eyes
    He took his life tonight
    And left with no goodbyes...
    -very sad and u worded this poem good i really liked it and enjoyed reading the poem fantastic job :) 5/5

  • 6 years ago

    by BlueJay

    Dang, this is wonderful!! It has a great use of imagery, thanks to the excellent word choice. Great job on the flow. The story is there and so is the emotion, though I think there could be a stronger voice...

    With blood on his hands
    And knives in his back
    The demons were around him
    Ready to viciously attack

    This ^^ is my favorite stanza. It is so clear and it has something about it that is different then the others, yet it helps create a cohesive piece.

    5/5 from me

  • Wow... Very, very, very powerful and revealing into core feelings.... Very well written and emotionally expressive.

    5/5

    - Shining Star!!

  • Wow... Very, very, very powerful and revealing into core feelings.... Very well written and emotionally expressive.

    5/5

    - Shining Star!!