I welcome you back. I enjoyed the story told here. I think the reading could have been a bit smoother as in places the word choice caused me to stumble(IMO). I believe if a smoother read this would be one of the best I've read in a long time.
"I felt" to perhaps feeling
"wanting" to wishing (??)
"allowing" to allowed
Welcome back TJ, it's always great to see your writings. You're writings often leaves me in awe.
Those are powerful endings, it's always great to dream again:)
7 years ago
I must say, from the title, I had no idea what this was going to be about. In the end, I am so glad I read it because it is absolutely amazing. The flow is wonderful, the length of the piece is nice, the word choice is terrific, and emotion is quite strong. What seems to be your voice in this piece is clear and well spoken. Once again, this is a magnificent piece. If I had any votes left I would nominate this.