Hey Blue Jay......well I gotta say i really love this piece.
I really like the tempo and how it flows - like water on glass and your voice in this is very direct and powerful as is the word choice.
"Don't tell a gamer how to play,
don't tell a ghost how to cry.
Trust me they'll have a lot to say,
and they won't even have to try."
This right here GENIUS.
1 year ago
by Ben Pickard
A couple of things really struck me about this piece. One, that it is a rhyming poem, which (unless I'm very much mistaken) isn't your usual 'flavour'. However, it is done very well, especially considering you were a mere thirteen at the time this went to print!
Which leads me nicely on to what a perceptive little write this is for one so young: heartfelt and full of the kind of obvious sense that only the young possess. Somewhere along the road, adults seem to mess up even the most simple of things...
Let people be exactly what they want to be; let them express themselves the way they should and the world would be made up of far more honesty, happiness and comfort within our own skins.
Well done on this; your talent shone through even then.