Comments : Jack-o-lantern

  • 12 years ago

    by Hallucinostic

    Reading this is a real treat, this early Halloween poem of yours, and thats no trick, lol. I really enjoyed reading this poem. Simple in a way but sometimes being simple is the best way to go. All in all, great poem. :D

  • 12 years ago

    by Decayed

    You really brought Halloween to here.. everything about it.. the movie, the jack-o-lanterns, Dracula, bats, zombies....

    lol @ the slingshots :P

    This is so amazingly mesmerizing,,, and spooky in places.

    I ENJOYYED this.

  • 12 years ago

    by Yakari Gabriel

    Although this was written for the contest..and it was very spur of the moment...and probably you just write for the sake of writing...

    I don't know if it is just me..and my conspiracy...but I swear there is something really meaningful and
    and deep hidden in this piece..specially when it reaches the ending...
    There is just a feel to it... Maybe I'm being crazy...but hmm..I will figure this out..sooner or later...
    Let me get my 'microscope' so I can figure out the first '7 lines' ;)

  • 12 years ago

    by Ste

    Again I love this. Clear in idea and fun in expression. I love bats as it happens and earn money from concerning them.........but i would not want them nibbling my mango tree either.

    Nice poem

  • 11 years ago

    by Britt

    I'm seriously cracking up reading this, especially because the books you have me reading. It's all adding up now! lol

    I love the wild west with pavement cracked - it reminded me of my towns sidewalks, or another old town, that you have to be careful on. And what better a night than Halloween to have to be careful on, really? I do have to say that I am totally shocked that you used just regular ole orange. You usually always go with some sort of off shade or something overly poetic.. but I love that it's just.. what it is. Orange. thats all.

    That bat part freaked me out, the nibble my mango tree sounded sexual to me, haha! But then I keep reading and they're vampires, and vampires are all about the sex here, so now I'm really cracking up. I swear I'm losing my mind lol.

    I keep forgetting you say holidays instead of vacations, so I was thinking you missed a few words or something, lol, but nope it's just that strange Aussie way :)

    "perches his bottle of
    bloody wine on your veranda
    and sings of sex in the
    raunchiest way."

    I'm sorry but I think this is my favorite stanza. It has everything Halloween isn't supposed to be, so controversial here, bahaha. I really love this. Was this for a medley/relay? I feel like it had to be some sort of challenge as this isn't stuff you would typically write out of no where. Either way, it was hilarious but awesome!