Comments : The obsession...

  • 12 years ago

    by Whispy.Gypsy

    Full of emotion great job i can feel what you were feeling when u wrote this... 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Ms Happiness

    This is amazing, well written:)5/5 I think ur gonna be my fav list:)

  • 12 years ago

    by Isabelle

    Hey amreen! thats a beautiful poem.. i liked it ! thanks for asking me to read it ! :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Misfit Silentts

    I love this. Very great.

  • 12 years ago

    by Hallucinostic

    Nice. Lovely words for a sad poem, makes it enjoyable to read. You did a very good job in making this an interesting poem, my friend. Nice. :D

  • 12 years ago

    by Lostlove1

    How gloomy and sad! Sometimes we just need to break free from our dark prison and fly away into the sun..I know I do, and to get there we must first let go of the darkness inside ourselves and inside our minds too. Great sad poem- worth the read
    And its like you are reading my mind. Enjoy your day. Lostlove1

  • 12 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    My heart wants to sing the melodies of nightingale,
    my soul wishes to embrace the freshness of roses,
    my smile wishes to be consume the hardworking nature possesed by bees
    and settle happiness on dull and sad faces...

    ^ my favourite stanza, so soft in nature,
    almost perfect but for: Nightingale should be capital N
    and
    3rd line remove the word 'be'

    This was full of great imagery and expression.
    I loved the whole thing. it was soooo sad.

    Love
    Tara
    xx

  • 12 years ago

    by average thoughts

    No doubt y u won..cngrts..and as abt ratin ..def 5,5,5..

  • 12 years ago

    by Liliana

    My heart wants to sing the melodies of nightingale,
    my soul wishes to embrace the freshness of roses,
    my smile wishes to be consume the hardworking nature possessed by bees,
    and settle happiness on dull and sad faces...

    my favorite, congratulations great job :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Jenna Bella Oldridge

    This poem is a job well done! I can find no faults.

    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by nouriguess

    I agree with my Connie 'Lostlove1' that this was such a gloomy write, I honestly have no time to leave a long detailed comment for the time being but I just wanted to say this piece intrigued me, and I am really in awe. I'll come back to this later as soon as possible, sweetheart, you are such an Indian smart walking perfection.

  • 12 years ago

    by Dark Secrets

    The title is intriguing, I didn't expect the poem to be about freedom. I like how you described freedom as an obsession and how having it is all a person thinks about. Your words are also wonderful, and it flows nicely.

  • 12 years ago

    by Beautiful Disaster

    This is an incredible poem! 5/5!

  • 12 years ago

    by 1DollA

    I like all the big words used in this one. But try making the prasing closer together. I felt awkward with a short line out of no where. Only my opinion, I still liked it. (:

  • 12 years ago

    by Autuumnbree

    Excellent, you have a gift of words. I like that your poems expresses emotions that many try to conceal and this takes courage..EP

  • 12 years ago

    by Beautiful Disaster

    This was a beautiful poem, the flow was sensational! i loved your wording, and the emotion that emits from this. well done 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Brittany C

    I thought that it was an ok poem. I thought that it could have been a little better but it wasn't a bad poem. The wording was ok and the flow was a little off to me.
    So I gave it a 4/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Jess

    This Poem, To Me, Is Defenitally A 5/5. If It Was Possible It would Be Worth More Than Even That.
    Your Wording Is Sensational And I Thought Your Flow Was Spot On.
    Incredible Poem! .. :)
    God Bless.
    Jessi

  • 12 years ago

    by L

    This poem is fine, I like it. I also notice that you use stanzas and they were organize o(^.^o) ( cheering expression lol) this made happy. I enjoyed more the poem.

  • 11 years ago

    by Khalid M Darwish

    Great and though provoking piece. Each stanza gives an interesting story. I loved the four-line style you used. Awesome