Comments : Star-Shine

  • 12 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    You have that ability to rhyme, which I definitely don't have - but I do know this poem flows perfectly. Really I think you've penned something easy to relate to here, but it wouldn't be a bad idea to add some punctuation. Otherwise, good job!

  • 12 years ago

    by Jenna Bella Oldridge

    This poem was very sad yet it had a sweet ending to it.

    "But someday she will
    feel it and all will be done
    Shimmering in her beauty
    much brighter than the sun"

    ^ I absolutely adore your ending.

    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Jenna Bella Oldridge

    This poem was very sad yet it had a sweet ending to it.

    "But someday she will
    feel it and all will be done
    Shimmering in her beauty
    much brighter than the sun"

    ^ I absolutely adore your ending.

    5/5