Comments : Deprived

  • 5 years ago

    by Britt

    I love this as you know. I was going to nominate it but I don't have any more nominations :( Booo!

    This is how I often feel with the ideas of my poems. I have so many ideas but nope, they just don't quite form. I like the literal sense in this, but I also love how I can dig deeper and have a more intimate and creative meaning :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Blissful

    Love love love this! Very unique, Yaki. :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Decayed

    Exactly.. you just spoke on behalf of almost every one here.
    I love this piece. So real and powerful.

  • 5 years ago

    by Innocent Fairy

    A great poem wonderfully done and so creative I loved it fantastic :) 5/5

  • 5 years ago

    by AppleChaz

    Excellent! I have few poems currently deprived.. :P

  • 5 years ago

    by nourayasmine

    I abort my poems most of the times, though they only need nine seconds to be written! lol I'm onsensing now...I know.

    So powerful, Yakz, so so powerful,

  • 5 years ago

    by nourayasmine

    Nonsensing...not onsensing....another Vodka please!

  • 5 years ago

    by Decayed

    Congrats Yaki. Well deserved.

  • 5 years ago

    by nourayasmine

    Congratulations!

  • 5 years ago

    by Lu

    Congrats Miss Yaki on the very deserving win. You've said so much with such few words !!!!

  • 5 years ago

    by Saerelune

    Yea Im late but i wanted to drop by anyway. =p i have to say that this poem of yours surprised. I don't think I've ever read something so short by you, while exposing one night metaphor. So i applaud you for taking this turn for once in your poetry. Abortion is truly a sensitive subject and to combine it with poetry truly reflects the way you feel about your art. You also managed to set this right cruel mood by the simplest of words. Nicely done.

  • 5 years ago

    by Liliana

    How creative of you to write this, a very unique way to refer yourself to a poem, just amazing, congratulations on your winning :)

  • 5 years ago

    by abracadabra

    Ooooh yeah. I hear a strong voice, bursting at the seams. Wonderfully done. I even liked your truncated ellipses, as if they too were aborted and didn't deserve fulfilment. Last three lines were class: all attitude, yet steeped in a sadness literally beyond words that I can wholly sympathise with.

  • 5 years ago

    by WiNTERC0C0A

    I cannot stop reading it.
    It's a masterpiece ... don't know what else to say. (:

  • 2 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    Just cleverly and wonderfully done!