Comments : Love Mountain

  • 12 years ago

    by Decayed

    Very very very excellent Mat..
    I like how you managed to keep a firm hold on the melody in each stanza.

    And the loveliest part was the end.. Amazing twist!

  • 12 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    I loooove this poem!!! It was so sweet and romantic..... until the end!! yes it was unexpected twist, but I just didn't think the poem needed it. It was sad! Cause the whole poem was so sweet, and I envisioned the sweetest moments between two people who love each other!

    But still amazing - and you created beautiful imagery!

  • 12 years ago

    by Meme

    With your words; you took me to an amazing lovely place. The way you described every feeling you had, every gesture you made was just fantastic. The whole time I am thinking I so want to be loved in this way, that offcourse before I got to the end.
    WOW!! What a twist Matt, but yes I got the message you wanted to deliever to the reader.

    Great write smiley face ;)
    Keep it up !!

  • 12 years ago

    by Innocent Fairy

    Wow amazing once again and another fav of mine from u just wonderful and a splendid write everythings lovely and fantastic :) 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by average thoughts

    Anothr beautiful poem..
    Just evrything is perfct..
    U r so gud at writing love poems..
    Ful points

  • 12 years ago

    by Mia

    I like the rhyming so much, it is really amazing..
    But I believe that having more rhyme in this paragraph will make it outstand more!
    "We have been through so much together, "
    holding hands through all of the journey.
    Even when the thunder tried to break us,
    we held onto each other so tightly."

    I was thinking of something like:
    We have been through so much together,
    holding hands through all of the journey,
    (and so they will forever"
    Even when the thunder tried to break us,
    we held onto each other so tightly
    (and this is a proof that
    no one, nothing can ever separate us"

    Still yours is amazing.. Hope my feedback helps :)

    Mia..