Comments : Eyes

  • 12 years ago

    by BlueJay

    This piece seemed odd at first but after the first couple lines it began to make sense. There is a lot of amazing description as well as a great word choice. Excellent piece.

  • 12 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    The ending really struck a chord in me- I loved how you made such colorful and intricate examples of the eye and going beyond what I would have ever observed, it brought a lot of images in my mind, and wanting to understand that depth too. Really uniquely written with character- your love and admiration for eyes is brilliant and illuminates this whole piece is a fresh way.

    "glowing with the beauty of perfect identity."

    I like how you brought together these words in this first stanza......excellent choice and I can't say anything else but it was thought-provoking and beautiful. Eyes that hold our identity :)

    Take care.
    MaryAnne

  • 12 years ago

    by Whatever works

    Wow i loved this
    especially the way you ended it
    you need them , i interpreted as needing someone els's eyes.
    but really good poem

  • 12 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    I really liked this poem. Maybe it was the flow of it or the diction, I can't pen point what exactly I just liked reading it. Nice work. -Nik

  • 12 years ago

    by Ebony Hope

    Eyes are wonderful things. You really take them to a whole new dimention in this piece though. The way you started is so gripping and the end is paralyzingly fabulous. 5/5 without a doubt.