I want to be A Desert

The title intrigued me. And I'm glad it did as this is a splendid poem...loved the descriptions and the feeling better you create of a lonely desert

Just beautiful, so much to absorb in your arid oasis. Well done-

I want to be a desert
opened and wide unbounded by
lonely sunsets or forgotten mists,
to find no footprints after
a metaphorical tide
neither graven on golden
salt grains, nor molten when it
unexpectedly rains.

opened and wide unbounded by

^^^

I think there's something wrong with this line Nana? Think it should be

open and wide, unbound by

You start the stanza off with.."I want to be' which is present tense..opened and bounded are in the past tense. Also feel the comma is necessary if you decide to change it.

The rest of the verse? What can I say. A great sense of yearning is felt here. I got the feeling you want to be alone to maybe ponder your future but there was still so much hope also felt that you will make a choice in the end that will be the correct one.

What else can I say....another lovely write from you.

Rania, every other piece becomes so arid when someone reads such piece.

I LOVE it.

This was such a strong piece Rania, and I know throughout the day I've honestly come to read it again and again. This so vivid and kind of mysterious for the reader, thinking of what it would be like to be, not just to be on a desert, but be a desert.....it's like you are not the desert yet, you haven't gotten there yet, but you want to be with every bone. I've considered myself as an element before, but not in this way, how you vastly describe what presence you hold and how others approach you (the scientists, philosophers, poets)..I loved the opening lines that leave me looking through your stand point. There were many lines here I thought were priceless though, I liked how you described about poets choosing you as their reference point of emptiness, sadness. It was stunning how much desire was put into this and "dramtists heart"- really made me think out of my own comfort zone and into this world you open up.

So after reading, what kind of made my heart smile was how you realize that though you are alone and your surrounding proves this, God is still watching. I loved that so much. Just the kind of inspiration I need, and you would need if you were a desert by yourself....

5/5. You make your poem personal, your own, and it sets something new in me, a really refreshing write. Good work :)

Thanks for sharing!
MaryAnne