Absolute magic. You are brilliantly creative in this. I have to add it to favorites I so enjoyed every line
6 years ago
Congrats, too on this :)
6 years ago
I knew without a doubt this piece would win and when I was reading over the nominations I thought to myself..theres a really good chance shes gonna take two spots and I was right again. Congrats Sibs, well deserved, you showoff! LOL
/They flirt with
Orion, casting eyes at his shining
I just loved it :D
//bathe religiously, luxuriously,
in the foam of the Milky Way,
bubbling with gossip and
using asteroids to scrub
each others backs.
what an amazing imagination you got... so unique and beautifully worded.
I haven't found many poems written on universe ... this one reallly is breathtaking ... specially the images you have created :D
This poem caught my eye, and it never left. It has the piquance of 10 on my Scoville scale of 1-10 (a scale used to rate the hotness of various chili peppers). I guess I have a special weakness for poetry that uses Greek mythological symbolism of the constellations to spice it..... It makes you look at the sky in awe. Though classified in "nature poems". it probably fits in the category of love poems, perhaps unfulfilled.
The title Pleiades denotes the constellation of seven sisters. The description of the seven sisters...sizzling, hot and blue ...is what gives it the 10/10 on the spice scale. The middle aged is a little anti-climax in there...could have been omitted. Sips of ....cocktails with wisps of nebula garnishes...deliciously painted. Flirting with Orion....I would not, he was an animal slayer and supposedly raped Oenopion's daughter, Aero or Leiro, because he could not marry her. But does it matter in love poetry? He was also a great warrior, a hunter and perhaps many fair maidens fell for him. There is a left over feeling of unfulfilled love here, as the poetess leaves the thoughts incomplete, but again the chosen words and the imagery of the constellations in love is painted so vividly. So, it does invoke those butterflies for the reader, but leaves it to the reader to fill in their thoughts.