Smooth flow, clean words, simple and straight to the point. I like the way it ends. Are you writing this from experience?

Don't stop writing. :)

That is so inspirational.. It's like you're saying: come as you are... :)

This is a lovely poem. I like the message you conveyed which is to open up (be open minded) to new ideas so that those ideas could make a positive change in our lives. But also that if we don't seek help or say what is troubling us then how do we expect others to know? So there is always hope for everyone to turn their lives in a positive way as long as they fill themselves with courage and also that they really need to want the change.

5/5

Excellent job, this was amazing, from word choice, to flow, the feelings were just impressive. there was this strength in your tone, tho it sensed sadness too.

a great mixture, u should be very proud of this piece.!!!!
WELL DONE..sarah

This is beautifully written and very good advice for anyone

A positive attempt. liked it how beautifully you've described it with a real good message at last :) 5/5

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